Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Underground Railway Systems

City	Date opened	Kilometers of route	Passengers per year (in millions)
London	1863	394	775
Paris	1900	199	1191
Tokyo	1927	155	1927
Washington DC	1976	126	144
Kyoto	1981	11	45
Los Angeles	2001	28	50

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities

and they are

London it was opened in the year 1863 and the distance is about 394km and the passengers visited per year are 775 millions.

Paris it was opened in 1900 and the route was 199km , passengers visited were about 1191 millions

Tokyo was opened in 1976 and the distance was 126km members visited were 144 million

Kyoto was opened in the year 1981 covering 11km and members visited were about 45 million

Los Angeles it was opened in the year 2001 and distance coved was 28 km and 50 million members were recorded who went there.

As we have observed the given information we can give a overview that the highest number of people visited the railway was in Tokyo with about 1927 million members visiting there and the least was recorded in Kyoto that were 45 million

but overall we can say that there are alot of people who use underground railways as when the number of people comes in millions then they are not counted in a less number.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant figures and include an overview that Tokyo has the most passengers while Kyoto has the fewest. However, the response only minimally summarises the table: it omits Washington DC, and the Tokyo entry gives the wrong opening year and route length, apparently using Washington DC’s figures instead. The overview also misses major comparisons, such as London having the longest route and the oldest system, while Tokyo has the highest passenger total. The final claim that millions mean the users are “not counted in a less number” does not report a meaningful feature of the data. To improve, check every figure carefully and select the clearest overall patterns rather than adding an unsupported general comment.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence, moving through city details and then offering an overview, so the reader can recognise that it is describing the table. However, most information is presented as a series of unconnected city statements, with little grouping or comparison. The opening fragment, “and they are,” does not lead smoothly into the list, and the final paragraph shifts from the data to a vague generalisation. The repeated city-by-city pattern also makes progression mechanical. Organise the response into a short introduction, a clear overview, and one or two paragraphs grouping the systems—for example, older and longer networks versus newer and shorter ones—and use comparisons to link the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “opened,” “covering,” “distance,” and “passengers,” and the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise. “Passengers visited” and “members visited” are not natural ways to describe annual railway use; “passengers used the system” is clearer. “Distance” is also less precise than “route length,” and “people who use underground railways” is too general for a comparison of the figures. Aim for accurate data-reporting language and vary expressions such as “recorded,” “carried,” and “served.” Check spelling and word forms, including “covered” and “overview,” to make the report more polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt mostly simple statements and some longer constructions, such as “As we have observed the given information we can give a overview,” but the range of sentence structures is limited and longer sentences are often poorly controlled. Several entries lack a clear sentence structure or punctuation, for example, “London it was opened in the year 1863…” and “Paris it was opened in 1900…”. There are also errors with articles and agreement, as in “a overview” and “the least was recorded in Kyoto that were 45 million.” Commas and full stops are inconsistently used, making the list difficult to read. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense reporting forms.

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