Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Underground Railway Systems

City	Date opened	Kilometers of route	Passengers per year (in millions)
London	1863	394	775
Paris	1900	199	1191
Tokyo	1927	155	1927
Washington DC	1976	126	144
Kyoto	1981	11	45
Los Angeles	2001	28	50

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given table illustrates the information of the underground railway systems in six countries including London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto, and Los Angeles. Broadly the rote is in kilometers. As per shown in the table the date when it opened and the passengers who were travelling approximately in millions per year.

It can be easily observed that the Tokyo railway station which was opened in 1927 had a small route of 155 kilometers. On this railway station people had travelled about 1927 millions per year. Due to fact that it is significantly more than Kyoto railway station which was created in 1981 and had a very small rote only 11 kilometers and only 45 million people travel to this station to other. In fact, the London station is so old, and its route is more than all and 775 million people travelled per year.

In fact, the Los Angeles railway station is very new its route is only 28 kilometers and only 50 million passengers away from this station to another. In addition to Washington DC station opened in 1976 on this platform 144 million people travelled from this station

As, far I have come to known after the reading the whole paragraph the from old station people travelled most.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant figures, including Tokyo’s 1,927 million annual passengers, London’s 394-kilometre route, and Kyoto’s 11 kilometres. However, the response only partially summarises the table: it gives no clear overview of the main patterns and omits Paris, despite its high passenger total and substantial route. Some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear, such as saying Tokyo’s route is “small” without comparing it with the other systems, and the final claim that older stations carried the most passengers is not supported by the figures: Tokyo, not London, has the highest usage. To strengthen the response, select the key extremes and comparisons, and ensure every conclusion matches the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and uses basic linking expressions such as “In fact” and “In addition,” so there is some organisation. However, the information does not progress through a clear overview and comparison: the discussion moves from Tokyo to Kyoto, then London, Los Angeles and Washington, without a consistent grouping or sequence. Several links are also difficult to follow, particularly “Due to fact that it is significantly more than Kyoto” and “from this station to another.” The opening description and closing sentence do not guide the reader toward the main patterns. Organise the report around clear comparisons—for example, oldest and longest systems, then passenger use and the newer, smaller networks—and use references that make each comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “route,” “passengers,” “opened,” and “per year,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the meaning hard to understand. “Railway station” refers to a station rather than the whole underground system, while “rote” appears to be a misspelling of “route.” Phrases such as “people travelled to this station to other” and “passengers away from this station to another” do not express annual passenger numbers clearly. Aim for precise table language, such as “network,” “route length,” and “carried passengers annually.” Avoid repeating “only” where a neutral comparison would be more suitable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction and verb forms sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. For example, “As per shown in the table” is not a complete, well-formed clause, and “Due to fact that it is significantly more than Kyoto railway station” lacks a clear grammatical connection between the comparison and the main sentence. The final sentence, “As, far I have come to known after the reading the whole paragraph the from old station people travelled most,” is difficult to interpret because of faulty clause structure and punctuation. Practise writing direct comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Tokyo carried the most passengers, at 1,927 million annually.”

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