Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Underground Railway Systems

City	Date opened	Kilometers of route	Passengers per year (in millions)
London	1863	394	775
Paris	1900	199	1191
Tokyo	1927	155	1927
Washington DC	1976	126	144
Kyoto	1981	11	45
Los Angeles	2001	28	50

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The informations shows, when unerground railway are estrablised and how many kilometers of route travels for passanger evry year in the six cities.

Overall, Underground railway station is most imoprtant part for passenger in this six city.London is the oldest stationed and los angeles is opned in after 2000.By far if taffic is looked paris and tokyo sation is taken most passengers.Although kiomiters traves in the routs are london and paris.

Loooking at the three older sation london unerground was the earliest to open on 1863 and it covers the major distance of 394 kilometers which was carried almost 775 passenger per year (in Millions).Second and thired oldest was paris and tokyo ,the were opned in 1900 and 1927 dispite of they were oldest there distance cover lower than london ,paris cover 199 and tokyo cover 155 which higer in comparision of kyoto and los angeles but paris and tokyo had most traveler since inception paris had 1191 and tokyo had higest among all 1927.

Los angeles was opned on 2001 which makes it a less expriance station for that reason its kilomiters are just 28 and passengers were also 50 only.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important comparisons: London is the oldest system and has the longest route, while Tokyo carries the most passengers; you also mention the newer Los Angeles system. These points show a relevant overview, but the report covers the table only partially. Washington DC is omitted, and Kyoto appears only in a comparison without its figures. Some data are also misreported: Tokyo’s annual passenger total is 1,927 million, but the response calls it “1927” without clearly identifying the unit, while London’s 775 million is described as “passenger per year.” The overview also makes broad claims such as “most important” that are not supported by the table. Include all six cities and accurately compare the extremes in opening date, route length and passenger numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to older systems and then Los Angeles. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and comparisons such as London versus Paris and Tokyo are relevant. However, progression is uneven: Washington DC is left out, Kyoto is mentioned only briefly, and the final paragraph focuses on Los Angeles without completing the comparison of the newer systems. Linking expressions such as “Second and thired” and “Although” do not always make the relationships between ideas clear, while several long sentences combine dates, route lengths and passenger figures in a confusing way. Group the cities by useful contrasts and use clearer sentence boundaries and references to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary suited to describing a table, including “earliest,” “distance,” “passengers,” and “in comparison.” However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make the report difficult to read, for example “unerground,” “estrablised,” “stationed,” and “traveler.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “station is most important part” and “less expriance station” do not accurately describe the information. Use standard terms such as “underground railway system,” “route length,” and “annual passenger numbers,” and check spelling carefully. More precise verbs such as “opened,” “covers,” and “carried” should be chosen according to what the figures represent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “Although” and a clause beginning “which makes it.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and prepositions often make the meaning unclear. For example, “underground railway are” has incorrect agreement, and “the were opned” lacks a correctly formed subject and verb. The sentence beginning “Second and thired oldest was paris and tokyo” also has faulty structure, while “on 1863” uses an incorrect preposition for a year. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking verb forms, agreement and punctuation.

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