Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Underground Railway Systems

City	Date opened	Kilometers of route	Passengers per year (in millions)
London	1863	394	775
Paris	1900	199	1191
Tokyo	1927	155	1927
Washington DC	1976	126	144
Kyoto	1981	11	45
Los Angeles	2001	28	50

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table illustrate information about the underground railway systems in six cities and city date opened for the kilometers of route and therefore passengers per year in millions. Overall, a city of London 1863 and their kilometers of route is 394 passengers per year is 775. Paris 1900 and kilometers of route is 199 passengers per year is 1191. Tokyo 1927 and kilometers of route is 155 passengers per year is 1927. Washington DC 1976 and kilometers of route is 126 passengers per year 144. Kyoto 1981 and kilometers of route is 11 passengers per year 45. Los Angeles 2001 and kilometers of route is 394 passengers per year 50. However, if London city 1863 their passengers is 775 and kilometers of route is 394 rather others city London have kilometers route is more than other. Moreover, Paris 1900 and kilometres of route is 199 passengers per year 1191 increase compare than London, Paris all most 416 more. Tokyo 1927 and kilometers of route is 155 passengers per year 1927 increase than Paris and Tokyo have more 736 pessengers per year. Washington DC 1927 and kilometers of route is 126 passengers per year 144 it is less than other city if Tokyo have 1927 passengers and DC have 1783 decrease. Kyoto to Loss Angeles have 45 to 50 but increase Los angeles than Kyoto. In conclusion, all of that six cities have passengers per year one of the most peak is Tokyo compare than other and tha after Paris is the highest passengers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You include figures for all six cities and identify some relevant comparisons, especially London’s longest route and Tokyo’s highest annual passenger total. However, the overview is not clearly separated from the data listing, and the main features are not accurately or consistently summarised. For example, Los Angeles is reported as having 394 kilometres, although the table gives 28, and Washington DC is later dated to 1927 rather than 1976. The comparison that Paris carries “416 more” than London is also unclear because the unit is not stated. The response therefore addresses the task only minimally: select the most important contrasts, check each figure, and give a concise, accurate overview before supporting it with data. (Nine words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response, with an opening, a sequence of city details, comparison markers such as “Moreover” and “However,” and a concluding sentence. These features show some awareness of how to connect information. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear stages: the opening immediately becomes a long list, and comparisons are mixed with repeated figures and unclear calculations. Phrases such as “if London city” and “Kyoto to Loss Angeles have 45 to 50” make the relationships between points difficult to follow. The conclusion repeats Tokyo’s ranking rather than drawing together the main contrasts. Group the older, larger systems and the smaller, newer ones, and use clear paragraphing and direct comparison sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses basic vocabulary relevant to the table, including “underground railway systems,” “kilometers of route,” “passengers per year,” and comparison terms such as “more” and “less.” This is enough to communicate the general subject, but the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise. For instance, “increase compare than London” and “more 736 pessengers per year” do not express the comparisons naturally, while “one of the most peak” is unclear. There are also spelling and form errors, including “pessengers,” “tha,” and “Loss Angeles.” Use precise reporting language such as “recorded,” “served,” and “the highest figure,” and check city names and key terms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences and use basic comparison structures, but most sentences are built from incomplete or poorly connected clauses. The opening, “The table illustrate information … and city date opened,” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “Overall, a city of London 1863” is not a complete sentence. Subject–verb agreement is also inaccurate in “The table illustrate,” while articles, possessives, and sentence boundaries are often missing or misused. These recurring errors make several relationships difficult to understand, even though individual figures and city names can often be recognised. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then use controlled patterns such as “London’s network is longer than Paris’s” and “Tokyo carries the most passengers.”

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