Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Underground Railway Systems
City Date opened Kilometers of route Passengers per year (in millions) London 1863 394 775 Paris 1900 199 1191 Tokyo 1927 155 1927 Washington DC 1976 126 144 Kyoto 1981 11 45 Los Angeles 2001 28 50
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In this table provided information illustrate that new innovation main features on underground railway system in this main six cities.
Overall, this main six cities implement into underground railway system when rapidly passengers per year in millions in cities .while Tokyo city first in passengers additional Paris,london,washingt on dc, Kyoto los Angeles include.
Firstly, in each city covers the kilometers of route in 394 at london it's was opened date was 1863 it's first underground railway system include 5 cities.however Tokyo is the highest passengrrs per year 1927.additional Paris is second place in passengers in this cities it's 1191.then third highest in this six cities is london it's covered 775 passengers per year moreover it covered 394 kilometers of route .
Finally they are three cities they are washington dc. Kyoto ,los Angeles in this washington dc covered 126 kilometers of route it started in 1976 year it's passengers list was 144. Therefore last was Kyoto it coved 11 kilometers and 45 passengers in this sic cities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the underground systems. However, the overview is unclear and lacks a strong summary of the trends. While the data is presented, the comparisons are often confusing or inaccurate (e.g., stating London is the third highest in passengers while listing 775, but failing to clearly contrast this with Tokyo's 1927). The information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, and the lack of clear analytical focus prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure the overview highlights the most significant differences, such as the disparity between the oldest system (London) and the newest (Los Angeles).
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and poor sentence structure. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly', 'Finally', and 'However', but they are often applied incorrectly or in a way that does not improve the flow of ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between cities. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks coherence, leading to a repetitive and disjointed presentation of the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'new innovation main features' and 'passengers list was 144'. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to data description (e.g., 'covered 394 kilometers of route' is used repeatedly). While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'passengrrs', 'sic') indicate a limited range that is just adequate for the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often grammatically incorrect. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, punctuation, and article usage (e.g., 'in this main six cities', 'it's was opened date'). These errors are persistent and occasionally make the text difficult to read. The lack of control over basic sentence construction and the high frequency of grammatical slips significantly limit the clarity of the report.
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