Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Underground Railway Systems

City	Date opened	Kilometers of route	Passengers per year (in millions)
London	1863	394	775
Paris	1900	199	1191
Tokyo	1927	155	1927
Washington DC	1976	126	144
Kyoto	1981	11	45
Los Angeles	2001	28	50

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given tabular chart illustrate the information about the underground railway system in different states.The data has been calibrated into millions.

Overall,it is crystal clear that London was one of the oldest cities and had the longest route , while Los angeles was the newest and kyoto had the smallest length.Tokyo was also older cities with higher numbers of passengers per year,however Washington had lower figures than the other older cities.

At the fleeting glance,it is evident that London was the older than other five cities and it was built in 1863.Its route was the longest about 394 kilometers,but its number of passengers was not the highest and was 775 millions per year.Meanwhile, paris was founded in 1900,showed 199 kilometers less than London route and its number of passengers was 1191 million.

probing ahead,Tokyo showed the highest number of passengers,accounting for 1927 millions.However,Kyoto was founded in 1981and the lowest number of passengers 45 millions per year.conversly,Los angeles,the youngest city in this daigram,showed 28 kilometers of route and 50 millions passengers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all key features of the data, including the oldest/newest systems and the highest/lowest passenger numbers. You successfully identified the main trends and made relevant comparisons between the cities. However, the overview is slightly cluttered with specific data points that would be better placed in the body paragraphs. To improve, ensure the overview focuses strictly on the most significant trends (e.g., the inverse relationship between age and passenger volume in some cases) rather than listing specific years or figures. The report is accurate and addresses all parts of the prompt effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'while', 'however', and 'meanwhile' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or forced, such as 'probing ahead' and 'at the fleeting glance', which are not standard academic phrases. Paragraphing is present, but the flow between sentences could be smoother. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central theme to improve the overall progression of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'calibrated', 'accounting for', and 'youngest city'. There are some minor errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'different states' (these are cities, not states) and 'older cities' (when referring to the systems). Spelling errors like 'daigram' and 'conversly' also occur. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for data description and ensure consistent accuracy in spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including missing articles ('the oldest', 'the newest'), subject-verb agreement issues ('Tokyo was also older cities'), and punctuation errors (missing spaces after commas). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the information, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of the text. To improve, pay closer attention to basic grammar rules such as article usage and ensure that your sentences are punctuated correctly.

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