Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Underground Railway Systems
City Date opened Kilometers of route Passengers per year (in millions) London 1863 394 775 Paris 1900 199 1191 Tokyo 1927 155 1927 Washington DC 1976 126 144 Kyoto 1981 11 45 Los Angeles 2001 28 50
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
the first city london whose opening date is 1863 and it travel to 394 kilometers and the rate of passenger per year is 775.
the second city paris whose opening date is 1900 and it travel to 199 kilometers and the rate of passenger per year is 1191.
the third city Tokyo whose opening date is 1927 and it travel to 155 kilometers and the rate of passenger per year is 1927.
the forth city Washington dc whose opening date is 1981 and it travel to 126 kilometers and the rate of passenger per year is 144.
the fifth city Kyoto whose opening date is 1981 and it travel to 11 kilometers and the rate of passenger per year is 45.
the six city Kyoto whose opening date is 1981 and it travel to 11 kilometers and the rate of passenger per year is 45.
the seven city Los Angeles whose opening date is 2001 and it travel to 28 kilometers and the rate of passenger per year is 50.
in every city the the rate of passenger per year is significant change and the peak rate is in paris in 1927.and the city of kyoto and los angeles the rate is almost tragnent and the trend of this table is positive and significant increasing the rate is incresing instantly.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to provide a summary or make meaningful comparisons. Instead, it lists the data for each city in a repetitive, mechanical fashion. The instructions require selecting and reporting main features, but the student merely transcribes the table rows. Furthermore, there are significant factual errors: the student lists Kyoto twice with incorrect data, and the concluding paragraph contains inaccurate claims, such as stating the peak rate was in Paris in 1927, which contradicts the provided table. The response lacks an overview of the data trends, which is essential for Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is structured as a series of isolated sentences rather than a cohesive report. The use of paragraphing is ineffective, as each city is given its own line, creating a list-like appearance rather than a structured text. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas or compare the cities. The progression of information is purely sequential based on the table rows, and the final paragraph is disjointed, making it difficult to follow the writer's intended analysis. The repetition of the same sentence structure throughout the response significantly hinders flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is extremely limited and repetitive. The student uses the same phrases ('whose opening date is', 'it travel to', 'the rate of passenger per year is') for every single entry. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or comparisons. Errors such as 'tragnent' (likely meant 'stagnant') and 'incresing' (spelling) further demonstrate a lack of control. The lexical range is insufficient to convey the information in a professional or academic manner, relying on basic, functional language that does not meet the requirements for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors and a lack of sentence variety. Almost every sentence follows the same simple structure, and there is a complete absence of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is poor, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and inconsistent spacing. There are also grammatical inaccuracies such as 'it travel to' (should be 'it covers' or 'the route length is') and 'the six city' (should be 'the sixth city'). The lack of subject-verb agreement and incorrect word forms make the text difficult to read and demonstrate a very limited grasp of English grammar.
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