Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Underground Railway Systems
City Date opened Kilometers of route Passengers per year (in millions) London 1863 394 775 Paris 1900 199 1191 Tokyo 1927 155 1927 Washington DC 1976 126 144 Kyoto 1981 11 45 Los Angeles 2001 28 50
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table chart information about the underground train systems in different six cities details. That is all types of details of railway line. this information is future are included, because there is compared to it.
The first of the city is London it is opened to 1863, kilometers of route 394, and year in 775. Secondly is Paris started with 1900, and route is 199, passengers in 1191 millions, that is many different of show it.
The third one is Tokyo, it is start of 1927, but distant is 155 and customers is 1927, that is the much of difference. then the next one is Washing ton DC in this 1976, 126 kilometers, and then 144 consumers.
However, the Kyoto is 1981 kilometers of 11 and passenger per year in millions of 45. Los Angeles Date opened the 2001 and kilometers is 28 and passenger for 50. all the countries detail not same because, everyone place population not similar
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by listing the data provided in the table. However, it fails to provide a clear overview or identify the main features and trends. Instead of summarizing, the response simply lists the data for each city in a repetitive manner. There is no meaningful comparison between the cities, which is a key requirement of the task. The information is presented as a series of isolated facts rather than a cohesive report. To improve, you should group the data (e.g., oldest vs. newest systems, or highest vs. lowest passenger numbers) and highlight significant differences or similarities.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused (e.g., 'The first of the city is...', 'Secondly is Paris...'). The referencing is often unclear, and the transition between sentences feels mechanical. The final sentence is disconnected from the rest of the text and does not serve as a logical conclusion. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'by comparison' to connect your ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as using 'consumers' or 'customers' instead of 'passengers', and 'distant' instead of 'distance'. The phrasing is often unnatural, which hinders the clarity of the report. The response lacks the specific vocabulary required for describing statistical data, such as 'figures', 'statistics', 'account for', or 'surpass'. You need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise terms related to data analysis and report writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and article usage (e.g., 'The first of the city is London it is opened to 1863'). Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of prepositions and verb tenses when describing past events.
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