Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Underground Railway Systems
City Date opened Kilometers of route Passengers per year (in millions) London 1863 394 775 Paris 1900 199 1191 Tokyo 1927 155 1927 Washington DC 1976 126 144 Kyoto 1981 11 45 Los Angeles 2001 28 50
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The take below illustrates information about the differents 6 ubran railway underground systems.
Overall, the table consists of four main parts . the table show the underground railways systems .
At the first the city lodon is opened on 1863 . it railways underground 394 kilometers of route as well as there are 775 milliom passangers in 12 months .it significantly increase in others cities.
the paris city opened on1900 around 199 kilometeres deeped. it takes 1191 million passengers per year
tokyo railways opened on 1927 and 199 kilometers of route then take 1927 candidates per year.
washing ton dc railways opened on 1976 .it undergroung 126 deeper and have 144 milion passangers per year
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While the student attempts to report data from the table, the information provided is incomplete and contains factual errors (e.g., stating Tokyo has 199 km of route instead of 155 km). The overview is very weak and lacks a clear summary of the main trends or comparisons. Because the response is under-length and fails to adequately cover the data provided, it falls into the lower band range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response lacks logical progression and clear paragraphing. Sentences are disjointed, and there is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas together. The structure is repetitive, with each city presented in a similar, mechanical way without any attempt to group information or make meaningful comparisons. The lack of an effective introduction or conclusion further hinders the overall flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as using 'candidates' instead of 'passengers' and 'deeper' to describe route length. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for data reporting, relying on basic and often incorrect phrasing. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect preposition usage, and poor sentence structure. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces placed incorrectly before periods. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. The frequent errors in basic grammar make the text difficult to follow at times.
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