Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Underground Railway Systems

City	Date opened	Kilometers of route	Passengers per year (in millions)
London	1863	394	775
Paris	1900	199	1191
Tokyo	1927	155	1927
Washington DC	1976	126	144
Kyoto	1981	11	45
Los Angeles	2001	28	50

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given table chart illustrate the information about the underground railway systems in six different cities namely, London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto, Los Angeles.

In an overview, it can be seen through the given data that, largest amount of passengers were travelled through railway where Kyoto and Los Angeles people were traveled less among all the cities. Moreover, highest route was established in London whereas, Kyoto's railway route was the shortest route among all the cities.

Furthermore, at first, London established underground railway system in 1863 with 394 kilometer routes. After 36 years, in 1900 Paris followed to make railways system in underground with 199 kilometer routes. The city which was Kyoto among all the cities were build it in 1981 with shortest route.

In addition, 1927 millions passengers were travelled in Tokyo in a year, where from Paris the numbers of travelers were 1191 millions. Similarly, 775 millions passengers travelled in London while only 45 millions passengers were used these underground railway systems in Kyoto.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the table, including the oldest and newest systems, as well as the extremes in route length and passenger numbers. However, the report lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the data. While you mention the cities, the comparison between them is somewhat disjointed. To improve, ensure you group the data more logically—for example, by comparing the older, established systems with the newer ones, or by highlighting the contrast between high-traffic cities like Tokyo and low-traffic ones like Kyoto. The data is accurate, but the analysis could be more insightful by focusing on the relationship between the age of the system and its usage.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'In addition', and 'Similarly' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel forced. For instance, the transition into the final paragraph regarding passenger numbers could be smoother. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'The city which was Kyoto among all the cities were build it in 1981', which is syntactically awkward and disrupts the logical progression of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the necessary information, such as 'established', 'underground railway system', and 'route'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward phrasing, such as 'largest amount of passengers were travelled' (should be 'highest number of passengers') and 'Paris followed to make railways system' (should be 'followed suit by constructing'). These errors occasionally impede the natural flow of the writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive sentence structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('largest amount of passengers were travelled', 'Kyoto and Los Angeles people were traveled') and incorrect verb forms ('were build it'). There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding the data, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your accuracy.

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