Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Underground Railway Systems
City Date opened Kilometers of route Passengers per year (in millions) London 1863 394 775 Paris 1900 199 1191 Tokyo 1927 155 1927 Washington DC 1976 126 144 Kyoto 1981 11 45 Los Angeles 2001 28 50
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table graph demostrate the undergorund railway systems in different six countries. The sataion open in city london in 1863 and have a very hight kilometer rate of 394 from which 775 millions people travel each year while in contrast to the other cities like Paris and Tokoyo are relitively opened 1900 and 1927 and having less kilometer routes and but higher passengers comparetively to London city. Paris contain 1195 million passengers per year and Tokyo have 1927 million travalers per year that are relatively more then the above ones. Washington Dc opened later in 1976 and have little less kilometers of route of 126 and passenger ratio is 144 that is lesser than the above ones but higher than Kyoto and LosAngeles they both decreased in kilometer routes or passenger per year rate that clearly portrays the high performence of Londaon and Paris and afterward Tokyo comes on the ither side very up in pessenger rate.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by selecting some main features from the table, such as mentioning the opening dates and route lengths for London, Paris, Tokyo, and Washington DC. However, the response lacks an overview and fails to systematically cover all the cities shown, completely skimming over Kyoto and Los Angeles with a vague reference. Furthermore, the data reported contains inaccuracies or misreadings of the table, such as stating Paris has 1195 million passengers when the table shows 1191, and confusing the passenger data for Tokyo. These shortcomings place the response at Band 5 for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is written as a single, massive run-on sentence without any paragraph breaks, which severely disrupts the logical flow and organization of ideas. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as the constant use of 'while in contrast' and 'above ones'. There is no clear overall progression of information, making the text difficult to follow. These structural issues correspond to Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring numerous spelling errors ('demostrate', 'undergorund', 'sataion', 'hight', 'relitively', 'comparetically', 'travalers', 'performence', 'ither', 'pessenger'). While the student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'kilometers of route' and 'passengers per year', the high frequency of spelling and word-form errors strains the reader and restricts the lexical score to a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on a single, continuous, highly convoluted sentence filled with coordination rather than proper subordination or clause structuring. There are frequent and systematic errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The sataion open... and have', 'Tokyo have'), and punctuation. These errors frequently distort meaning and impede communication, resulting in a Band 4.
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