Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Underground Railway Systems
City Date opened Kilometers of route Passengers per year (in millions) London 1863 394 775 Paris 1900 199 1191 Tokyo 1927 155 1927 Washington DC 1976 126 144 Kyoto 1981 11 45 Los Angeles 2001 28 50
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The grip from down information related to the underground railway methods by the six important cities.
Overall, it is clear that London has a largest route for the passengers per year like 394.While here is most down kilometers of route for passengers per year is 11.The most notiable point Tokyo which has a bigest passengers per year.
Underground railway systems showing that how many people travelling from there and how many kilometers of route every city.Like London which opened in 1863 with 394 kilometers route for 775 passengers and in Paris raliway system opened in 1900,199 route for 1191 passengers.
The Tokyo city which opened in 1927 with 155 km route for 1927 people.And the Washington DC has 126km route for 144 passengers.In the same way,Kyoto 11km route for 45 peoples which opened in 1981 and it was the short underground railway system in sixes cities.And the last city Loes Angeles opened in 2001 with 28km route for the 50 passengers per year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to summarise the table by identifying some key features and making comparisons, such as noting that London has the longest route and Kyoto is the shortest. However, there are significant data inaccuracies throughout the text. For example, the student states that London has 'a largest route for the passengers per year like 394' and confuses route length with passenger numbers in several places, claiming Tokyo has '155 km route for 1927 people' (misinterpreting 1,927 million passengers) and London has '775 passengers' (instead of 775 million). Furthermore, the overview is somewhat confused, and the data reporting lacks precision. This falls under Band 4.5 to 5.0, where the task is addressed only partially and key data points are misreported or misunderstood, impacting overall clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is organised into four paragraphs, attempting an introductory overview, body details, and a conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by poor referencing and unclear sentence structures, such as 'The grip from down information related to the underground railway methods by the six important cities.' Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, and the lack of logical transitions between sentences makes the progression hard to follow. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow within paragraphs is weak. This aligns with Band 4.0 to 4.5 descriptors, where information is not always arranged coherently and cohesion is faulty.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and often unnatural or inaccurate. Examples include phrases like 'grip from down information', 'most down kilometers', and 'bigest passengers'. The student struggles with basic collocations and word choice related to data interpretation (e.g., confusing 'route' with 'passengers'). There are frequent errors in word formation and spelling, such as 'notiable' instead of 'notable', 'peoples' instead of 'people', and 'Loes Angeles' instead of 'Los Angeles'. Because the lexical range is narrow and errors frequently strain the reader, this corresponds to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but most complex attempts are severely flawed or grammatically incomplete (e.g., 'Underground railway systems showing that how many people travelling from there and how many kilometers of route every city.'). There are constant grammatical errors involving missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty relative clauses. Punctuation is also problematic throughout the text. While meaning can sometimes be deciphered with effort, the high density of basic and complex structural errors places this firmly at Band 4.0.
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