Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Underground Railway Systems
City Date opened Kilometers of route Passengers per year (in millions) London 1863 394 775 Paris 1900 199 1191 Tokyo 1927 155 1927 Washington DC 1976 126 144 Kyoto 1981 11 45 Los Angeles 2001 28 50
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
It is the follow of the city and date opend and discuss the kilometers of rout passengers per year in millions and city nam London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington, Kyoto, Loa Angles.
The city of london 1863 and kilometers of route 394 and passengers per year in millions 775. The Paris 1900 and kilometers of route low 199 and passengers per year 1191 high.The tokyo 1927 and route low 155 and passengers high in paris 1927. Basically, follow the washington 1976 and kilometers of route 126 and passengers per year 144 very low of other passengers per year.
The city Kyoto since 1981 and kilometers of route in 11 and per year 45. Therefore, Los Angeles 2001 kilometers of route 28 and per year 50millions. They are highest of the Tokyo in 1927 and 155 per year 1927 millions.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarize the provided table regarding underground railway systems in six cities, but it struggles significantly with selecting and reporting the main features accurately. While the student mentions all six cities and includes some data points such as dates, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers, the information is presented in a fragmented, list-like manner. For instance, the writer states 'The city of london 1863 and kilometers of route 394 and passengers per year in millions 775', failing to construct a coherent overview or make meaningful comparisons. Furthermore, there are misinterpretations of the data, such as claiming 'They are highest of the Tokyo in 1927'. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a band score of 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization and progression of information in this response are severely limited. The text is broken into short, erratic paragraphs and disjointed sentences that lack logical transitions. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, as seen in awkward connectors like 'Basically, follow the washington' and 'Therefore, Los Angeles'. The referencing and pronoun use are also unclear, making it difficult to follow which data points belong to which cities in the final sentences. Paragraphing is not used effectively to structure the comparison. Due to these pervasive issues with logical arrangement and cohesion, the response falls into the Band 4 category.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on copying phrases directly from the prompt, such as 'kilometers of route' and 'passengers per year in millions'. There is a lack of flexibility and range, with frequent word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'It is the follow of the city' and 'route low 155'. Spelling errors are also present, including 'opend' instead of 'opened' and 'Loa Angles'. The limited vocabulary and frequent inaccuracies frequently strain the reader's understanding, which aligns with the descriptors for a band score of 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting almost entirely of fragmented, non-standard sentence structures rather than complete, well-formed clauses. The text lacks main verbs in many sentences, such as 'The city of london 1863 and kilometers of route 394'. Errors in grammar, punctuation, and capitalization are frequent throughout the response, severely distorting meaning and making it very difficult for the reader to parse the intended relationships between data points. Because the errors are pervasive and impede communication significantly, a band score of 4.0 is appropriate.
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