Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Underground Railway Systems
City Date opened Kilometers of route Passengers per year (in millions) London 1863 394 775 Paris 1900 199 1191 Tokyo 1927 155 1927 Washington DC 1976 126 144 Kyoto 1981 11 45 Los Angeles 2001 28 50
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The Table demostrate the information about the underground railway systems in six different cities.
Overall, The table show that the oldest Underground Railway System is London which opened in 1863, while the youngest railway system is Los Angeles and it was opened in 2001.
The oldest underground railway system is London which opened in 1863 and its route expand 394 kilometers and this system delivered around 775 Millions people in one year.Paris is also oldest system but not than the london. It is opened in 1900 its route around 199 kilometers long but it is smaller than the the london but the main thing is Paris system deliverd to 1191 Passengers in one year. Tokyo is the largest number of passengers 1927 in the contrast of 6 citeis it is opened in 1927, expand around 126 kilometers. Koyoto was opened in 1981 and it is smallest system in these six cities it is expand around 11 kilometers and its also serve Lowest number of passengers in one year the number of passenger aroun 45. The youngest and newest system is Los Angeles it was opened in 2201 and expand on 28 kilometers per year capacity 50 Millions passengers.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task only partially, as some information is inaccurate, incomplete, or poorly selected. For instance, the student states that Tokyo 'expand around 126 kilometers', whereas the table shows Tokyo's route length is 155 kilometers (126 kilometers belongs to Washington DC). Similarly, the passenger figure for Tokyo is misreported as 1927, which conflates the opening year with the passenger volume. Furthermore, the summary lacks a fully developed overview, and some details are repetitive or confused, such as the comparison between London and Paris. While a few main features are mentioned, the lack of accurate reporting and limited selection of data prevents the response from achieving a higher standing.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is some basic organisation with an attempt at an introduction and an overall statement, but the response lacks a clear overall progression. The body of the text collapses multiple cities into one dense, run-on paragraph filled with disjointed ideas and repetitive phrasing. Cohesive devices are inadequate, inaccurate, or overused, such as the repetitive use of 'and its' or 'it was opened'. Paragraphing is not used sufficiently to separate the distinct cities or ideas logically, making the text difficult to follow as a cohesive whole. Referencing and logical sequencing need substantial improvement to guide the reader smoothly through the data.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. There are spelling errors like 'demostrate' instead of 'demonstrate' and 'Koyoto' instead of 'Kyoto'. Word choice and form inaccuracies also appear, such as writing 'deliverd to 1191 Passengers' instead of delivering 1,191 million passengers, and 'capacity 50 Millions passengers'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary related to data reporting, the persistent errors in collocation, spelling, and word form restrict the lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response features a limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions like 'and' or 'while'. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to run-on structures such as 'Kyoto was opened in 1981 and it is smallest system in these six cities it is expand around 11 kilometers and its also serve Lowest number of passengers...'. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense usage, missing articles (e.g., 'the youngest and newest system is Los Angeles it was opened in 2201'), and prepositions. These frequent grammatical errors cause noticeable difficulty and confusion for the reader.
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