Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Underground Railway Systems

City	Date opened	Kilometers of route	Passengers per year (in millions)
London	1863	394	775
Paris	1900	199	1191
Tokyo	1927	155	1927
Washington DC	1976	126	144
Kyoto	1981	11	45
Los Angeles	2001	28	50

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table compares about the subway railway methods in six cities.

Overall,it is noticed that London city accounted for the largest proportion kilometres of route Whereas,Tokyo represented a substantial share and smallest proportion kilometres of route is Kyoto city.

An analysis of the image reveals that London had 394 kilometres of route with 775 millions people of passengers per year were travelled.Followed by Paris,Tokyo cities are 199 kilometres of route with 1191 millions of passengers were travelled here the passenger are increase in Paris.155 kilometres of route and passengers 1927 millions increases two times when compares with other two citie

Image of the table proven that Washington is 126 kilometres of route with 144 millions of passengers here it is drop in route and passengers.Los angles is second most least city for kilometres of route and passenger 28 kilometres and 50 millions of people.And final city is kyoto which marked last in kilometres of route and passengers are 11Kms and 45 millions of passengers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify relevant features, including London’s longest route and Kyoto’s shortest, and you report figures for all six cities. However, the overview is incomplete and partly inaccurate: Tokyo, not London, has the highest annual passenger total, while Kyoto has the lowest. The body also gives limited direct comparison between the cities, and some figures are difficult to interpret in phrases such as “passengers 1927 millions increases two times.” To strengthen the response, select the clearest overall patterns—London’s route length, Tokyo’s passenger numbers, and the contrast between the older, larger systems and the newer, smaller ones—then report each figure accurately and explain comparisons clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, an overview, and paragraphs that cover the data, so the reader can recognise its general purpose. However, progression within the body is difficult to follow: the discussion moves from London to Paris and Tokyo, then to Washington, Los Angeles, and Kyoto, but comparisons and links between these details are not consistently clear. Connectors such as “Followed by” and “And final city” are either awkward or repetitive, and the long sentence about Paris and Tokyo combines several facts without clear boundaries. Grouping the cities by a meaningful contrast and using shorter, clearly linked sentences would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “kilometres of route,” “passengers per year,” “largest,” and “smallest,” which helps convey the subject. However, the range is limited and several word combinations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “subway railway methods,” “largest proportion kilometres,” and “passengers were travelled.” Repetition of “city,” “route,” and “passengers” also makes the report less precise. Choose standard terms for describing a table and its figures, and use accurate collocations such as “route length” and “carried passengers annually.” Check spelling of city names, including “Los Angeles,” and avoid using “proportion” when reporting absolute totals.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to combine information in longer sentences, but these structures are often faulty, and the range of sentence forms remains limited. For example, “London had 394 kilometres of route with 775 millions people of passengers per year were travelled” has an unclear clause structure and errors in number and verb form. The sentence beginning “Followed by Paris, Tokyo cities are…” also lacks a clear grammatical connection between the cities and their figures. Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, as in “Overall,it” and “route Whereas.” Use straightforward subject–verb sentences first, such as “London’s network was 394 kilometres long,” then add comparisons in a separate sentence. Review articles, plurals, and past-tense reporting.

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