Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Underground Railway Systems

City	Date opened	Kilometers of route	Passengers per year (in millions)
London	1863	394	775
Paris	1900	199	1191
Tokyo	1927	155	1927
Washington DC	1976	126	144
Kyoto	1981	11	45
Los Angeles	2001	28	50

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The take beneath gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The chart shows the underground railway systems.

These chart show four rows at the top of the chart.The first one city and other one is date opened and third one is kilometers of route along with last option is passengers per year (in millions).

First of all the city name is London also opened in 1863 and klometers of rute is 394 in addition, last option is pssengers per year 775.The second most famous city Paris was established in the year of 1900 and kilometers of route is 199 and the last is pssengers per year 1191 as well as other city is Tokyo was launched in 1927 also kilometers of route is 155 and pasengers per year is 1927 along with Wishington DC was inaugurated in 1976 plus kilometers of route is 126 and the passengers per year 144.The second last city that's Kyoto was founded in 1981 additionally kilometers of route is 11 and passengers per year is 45.The last city is Los Angeles was started in the year of 2001 as well as kilometers of route is 28 and the passengers per year is 50.

There were make comparisons in these cities.In my opinion the first three is very old and its expansive than last three cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You include figures for all six cities, so the reader can find the main data, and you identify that London is the oldest system while Los Angeles is the newest. However, the response mainly lists each city rather than selecting and summarising the most important features. The overview, “the first three is very old and its expansive than last three cities,” is unclear and does not accurately compare the data: the first three systems are older, but they are not all larger or busier than the later ones. For example, Tokyo has the highest annual passenger figure, while London has the longest route. State these key contrasts clearly, then group the figures by notable patterns instead of describing every row in sequence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows the table’s order, moving from London through to Los Angeles, which gives the reader a basic sequence. However, most information is packed into one long paragraph, and the repeated linking phrases—“also,” “in addition,” “as well as,” and “along with”—make the progression mechanical rather than showing meaningful comparisons. The opening also repeats the task information in two sentences before the data begins. Use a clear overview paragraph followed by one or two paragraphs grouping the older, larger systems and the newer, smaller ones. Shorter sentences and more precise links such as “by contrast” or “whereas” would make relationships between the figures easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant terms for describing the table, including “kilometers of route,” “passengers per year,” and “inaugurated.” However, vocabulary is often repetitive or imprecise: “the last option” is used repeatedly for the passenger column, and “famous” does not describe Paris’s position in the data. Several spelling errors, including “klometers,” “rute,” “pssengers,” and “pasengers,” also reduce accuracy. Some alternatives, such as “established,” “launched,” and “founded,” are applied awkwardly to railway systems. Build a small set of accurate data-reporting expressions—such as “opened,” “route length,” and “annual ridership”—and use them consistently to describe the figures and comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect several pieces of information in longer sentences, but sentence structures are often incomplete or difficult to control. For example, “These chart show four rows at the top of the chart” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “There were make comparisons in these cities” uses an incorrect verb construction. The long sentence beginning “First of all the city name is London” joins many data points without clear sentence boundaries, and the final comparison, “the first three is very old,” has agreement problems. Use complete, shorter sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check singular/plural agreement. A simple structure such as “London opened in 1863 and has the longest route, at 394 kilometres” would improve clarity and accuracy.

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