Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Underground Railway Systems

City	Date opened	Kilometers of route	Passengers per year (in millions)
London	1863	394	775
Paris	1900	199	1191
Tokyo	1927	155	1927
Washington DC	1976	126	144
Kyoto	1981	11	45
Los Angeles	2001	28	50

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given data illustrate the undergroud railway systems in six cities like London, Paris, Tokya, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles.

London underground railway was the oldest railway track as compare to the other railway station.However, it establish in 1963. Furthermore,it cover 393 Kilometer distance which is longest distance in the data.In addition,it carry 775 passenger per year .

Paris railway is the one of the second longest and oldest track which is cover 199 distance and

1191 passenger per annum.Although tokyo establish in 1926,it cover 155 distance and 1927 passnger per year.

on the other hand, Washington DC and Kyoto establish between 1976 to 1981 which was 5 year gap and talke about the distance and passanger which is contradict 126 and 11 distance and 144 and 45 passenger carry respectively.

Finally, Los Angeles was begin from 2000 century

and it is the shortest distance cover railway station and it is carry 50 passanger per year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the six cities and report several key figures, including London’s route length, Tokyo’s passenger total, and the smaller systems in Kyoto and Los Angeles. However, the overview is not clearly stated, and some important comparisons are missing or inaccurate. London opened in 1863, not 1963; Tokyo opened in 1927, not 1926; and Los Angeles began in 2001, not 2000. The route lengths are also given without units in several places, and London’s figure is reported as 393 rather than 394. The response therefore covers the data only partially, with limited selection and some incorrect reporting. Add a concise overview highlighting the oldest and largest network, and the highest passenger use, then check every figure against the table.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is divided into paragraphs and generally moves from London and Paris to the other cities, so the reader can follow the broad topic. You also use linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “In addition,” “Although,” and “Finally.” However, the organisation is mostly a sequence of city-by-city details rather than a clear comparison of the main patterns. Some links are inaccurate or awkward: “Although” does not express a clear contrast in the Tokyo sentence, while “on the other hand” introduces Washington and Kyoto without a well-defined opposing point. The final paragraph is also very brief. Grouping the oldest and longest systems together, then comparing passenger numbers and the newer, smaller networks, would create clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the table, including “oldest,” “longest,” “distance,” and “passenger per year,” and the reader can usually identify the intended topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “railway station” for a railway system, “cover 199 distance,” and “passenger carry.” Spelling errors, including “undergroud,” “Tokya,” and “passanger,” also reduce clarity and control. Try to use precise terms consistently, such as “route length,” “annual passengers,” and “carried,” and avoid repeating “distance” when the table reports kilometres of route. Careful proofreading would help make the vocabulary more accurate and appropriate for a data summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “Although” and a comparison involving Washington DC and Kyoto. However, many sentences contain errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction, which sometimes make the relationships between figures difficult to understand. Examples include “it establish in 1963,” “it cover 393 Kilometer,” and “which is cover 199 distance.” The sentence beginning “Washington DC and Kyoto establish between 1976 to 1981” also has an unclear grammatical structure. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops and some sentence fragments. Practise accurate past-tense forms (“opened,” “covered,” “carried”) and build shorter, complete sentences before adding more complex comparisons.

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