Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Underground Railway Systems

City	Date opened	Kilometers of route	Passengers per year (in millions)
London	1863	394	775
Paris	1900	199	1191
Tokyo	1927	155	1927
Washington DC	1976	126	144
Kyoto	1981	11	45
Los Angeles	2001	28	50

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the given table it provide the information about the underdrown railway in the several cities,london, paris,tokyo,washington DC, kyoto,los angles.

Overall, the tokyo has the higest passengers per year then fell in the pos angeles and kyoto .

The cities has date opened and kilometers of route and the last passengers traiver feom railway . futhermore the london has date opened 1863, it has kilomerter 394 passenger move per year 775 but it rose in paris date of opened 1900 and kilometers 199 and passengers traiver per year 1191,but the gowup in tokyo it hasd 1927 the klomer are 155 and passsenger move in the yearr is 1927 moreover it is fall in from this stace the washington dc has the date of booking is open 1976 it has 126 kilomerers of route ,the passengers has traver per year is 144 in the kyoto the date of booking is open in 1981 the kilometers are 11 the passengers travel per year is 45 at last los angeles the open dates 2001 the kilomer of route 28 and the passengers travel per yeear is 50 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You include information from all six cities and identify Tokyo as having the highest annual passenger figure, which is a relevant overview point. You also report several dates, route lengths and passenger totals, so the response does attempt to summarise the table. However, the overview is incomplete and partly unclear: “then fell in the pos angeles and kyoto” does not accurately describe the figures, since Los Angeles has slightly more passengers than Kyoto. The main comparisons are not clearly selected or explained, and some figures are difficult to interpret in the long body sentence. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the oldest/largest system and the highest/lowest passenger totals, then compare the cities using accurate, clearly stated figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows the table’s general order, moving from London and Paris through to Los Angeles, and words such as “furthermore,” “moreover” and “at last” show an attempt to connect information. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and nearly all the detailed reporting is packed into one long sentence. This makes comparisons hard to follow and causes the linking words to feel mechanical rather than to show clear relationships. The opening and overview are separated by blank lines, but the body needs clearer organisation. Use an introduction, a brief overview, and two grouped detail paragraphs—for example, older/larger systems and newer/smaller systems—and make each sentence report one or two related comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “date opened,” “kilometers of route” and “passengers per year,” which helps convey the table’s categories. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make the information difficult to understand: “passengers traiver,” “kilomerter,” “gowup” and “date of booking is open.” The repeated use of “has” and “the passengers travel” also limits precision. Choose standard reporting language and use it consistently, such as “opened,” “route length,” “carried/served passengers” and “annual ridership.” Check spelling carefully, especially for city names and key data terms, so the reader can focus on the comparisons rather than decoding the wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and to report several data points, but sentence control is very limited. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “the table it provide” and “the cities has,” while “the Tokyo has” and “it has date opened” show problems with articles and sentence construction. The long body sentence joins many clauses with commas and conjunctions, so relationships between the figures become unclear. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first—for example, “London’s system opened in 1863 and has the longest route, at 394 km.” Then combine related facts with accurate conjunctions and check subject–verb agreement, articles and sentence boundaries.

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