Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

To help other people someone says that it is important to being rich and it is most vital thing.

Moreover I agree that having too much money to help others innocent and poor people. helping the people with money giving them fund who people are not to pay their dues which are studying in different universities or in different schools and colleges. To hepl others people who are suffering from different diseases and do not pay treatment dues and cannot afford doctors fee. Other people need houses and homes that are basic need. For this circumstances money and enrichment is much needed to help poor people. someone burrow money or fund from the rich men people and they do not pay their burrowing fund. At these situation people help others by money and the needy people need such these things. These are different types of needs person.

Moreover, I disagree that helping other to need money because some people do not need help about money their needs canot fullfiled by money. The people that are travelling to go some place and they do not know how far off places to reach their destination. At that time we should help them to tell them accurate place in which they are travelling. Other help is also required which are many in numbers.

I n conclusion I also agree to help other people through money But I also disagree that helping others by money is not enough but giving good advice about some plan is also helping.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position that is partly supportive and partly qualified: the examples of funding education, medical treatment and housing show how wealth can help people, while your point that advice can also be valuable responds to the qualification in the question. However, the central issue is whether helping others is the most important benefit of being rich, and this is not clearly weighed against other benefits or explained as your main position. Several examples are listed rather than developed, and the borrowing example is difficult to connect to your argument. State your degree of agreement directly, then explain why this opportunity matters more or less than other advantages of wealth, using one or two developed examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from financial help to non-financial help and ends with a conclusion, and “Moreover” and “In conclusion” signal these stages. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear. The first paragraph combines education, medical costs, housing and borrowing without showing how each point develops the previous one; the sentence about people borrowing money is especially hard to follow. Repeated use of “Moreover” does not clearly mark the contrast in the second body paragraph, and references such as “these things” are vague. Use separate paragraphs for your main reasons, begin each with a clear topic sentence, and connect examples explicitly to your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “treatment,” “universities,” “basic need” and “advice,” so the reader can identify the areas of help you have in mind. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “helping the people with money giving them fund,” “burrowing fund” and “enrichment.” Spelling errors, including “hepl,” “canot” and “fullfiled,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural phrases and check spelling: for example, describe “providing financial support for students” or “covering medical expenses.” Avoid repeating “help” and “people” by using suitable alternatives such as “assist,” “support” and “those in need.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express reasons and contrasts, including “I disagree that helping other to need money because…” and the final contrast between financial help and advice. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts to build longer sentences are often faulty. Examples include “it is important to being rich,” “having too much money to help others innocent and poor people,” and “The people that are travelling to go some place,” where sentence construction and verb forms make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Articles, plurals and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “a basic need” and “different types of needs person.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join related ideas with clear clauses and check subject–verb agreement and articles.

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