Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

When are talking about people or and person so I would say that each and everyone has there own way of thinking about the things they have or about anything that they are going through

As I have observed there are few people who are rich and even help people who are not financially stable or people who have very low income

But I have seen there are also people who are rich but are not interested in helping other

I would say each and everything has two sides, It completely depends on the person who is in that situation or who is rich wheather they want to help or not it is there personal choice nobody can even question there decision as it is not a topic to be discussed.

In my opinion or in my view I would definitely agree to that if a person is financially very stable or rich then he should definitely help others and try to do whatever they can do even if it is a very small act then also it can make a very big difference for someone who are struggling with financial crises

And I would also state that I definitely Disagree with the people who have alot of money and don't try to help other's they should think about this that even there small act of empathy or giving something to others can make a very big impact on there day life and can also gain a positive response from people and can earn alot of respect even of they are not doing it publically as the person whoever we are helping atleast know about there act.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the question and give a recognisable position: you say that helping is a rich person’s choice, but also state that you agree they should help and disagree with those who refuse. This responds to the extent question, though the position is not fully consistent because you call the decision entirely personal and later say wealthy people should definitely help. Your examples remain general—people with low incomes and the impact of a small act—so the reasons are asserted rather than explained or illustrated. Develop one or two clear reasons, such as how financial support can meet urgent needs, and clarify whether helping others is an opportunity, a responsibility, or both. This would make your response more fully developed and consistent.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the opening paragraphs introduce differing behaviour among wealthy people, and the final paragraph gives your own view. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the first paragraph moves from people’s opinions to personal choice without clearly linking these points. The contrast between “nobody can even question their decision” and your later criticism of people who do not help also needs a clearer transition. Connectors such as “But,” “In my opinion,” and “And” are used, but some links feel repetitive or do not show the precise relationship between ideas. Use distinct paragraphs for your position and supporting reasons, and make each paragraph develop one main point with clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the central topic, with relevant expressions such as “financially stable,” “low income,” “act of empathy,” and “make a very big impact.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, particularly “help,” “people,” “very,” and “big.” Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, including “there day life” and “positive response from people,” which make parts of the argument less clear. Aim for more precise topic vocabulary and natural collocations, such as describing people as “financially secure” and explaining that support can “improve someone’s quality of life.” Check spelling and word forms as well, since errors such as “wheather” and “publically” reduce accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but control is uneven, and complex sentences often contain several errors. The opening, “When are talking about people,” is missing a subject and has an incorrect verb form; “each and everyone has there own way” also shows problems with agreement and possessive forms. In the final paragraph, the long sentence beginning “And I would also state” is difficult to follow because clauses are joined without clear punctuation, and “the person whoever we are helping atleast know” has errors in clause structure and agreement. These problems sometimes make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine related ideas using controlled subordinate clauses and check punctuation.

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