Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, a lot of individuals argues that the most crucial thing about being wealthy is that one has opportunity to assist other people. Similarly, i strongly believe that being rich and helping peoples are both different things however if any wealthy gets the chance to help they should consider it.

Firstly, In this modern world, learning any new skill or doing effort to achieve anything is completely doable. Moreover, there are a lot of entrepuners who have excellent idea and desire to achieve something. however, lack of funds and a mentorship just stop them. if they get a investor along with his mentorship who fund there project and guide them on path for success.

Secondly, typical people think help has only one form which comes as money. nevertheless, i strongly believe that helping other can be done in numerous different ways. For instance, helping someone to learn new skill, helping someone wih guidance. So, we should be looking for various kind of assist from others not only in form of money.

Overall, from my prespective, rich gets the same opportunity same as the other individual gets. help can be done with any skill or meaning you provide to the person who needs it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a position, saying you “strongly believe” that wealthy people should consider helping others, and your examples of funding and mentoring entrepreneurs and teaching skills are relevant. However, the response only partly answers the central question: it does not clearly explain how helping others compares with other important aspects of being rich, and the claim that rich people have the “same opportunity” as everyone else is not developed. The supporting ideas are brief, and the conclusion mostly repeats them rather than drawing the argument together. The response also contains 203 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough space to develop your position and examples. Explain the extent of your agreement directly and extend each main point with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning with “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a concluding paragraph. This helps the reader identify the main points, and the examples generally follow the ideas they illustrate. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear. For example, the first body paragraph ends with “if they get a investor…” as an incomplete thought, leaving the relationship between the example and your argument unfinished. The final paragraph also repeats earlier points without clearly summarising how they answer the question. Some linking words, such as “Moreover” and “nevertheless,” are used mechanically or do not clearly express the relationship between ideas. Build complete paragraph arguments and use transitions that show the precise connection between each sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “wealthy,” “mentorship,” “guidance,” and “numerous different ways,” and you attempt to express ideas beyond basic statements. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make parts of the response less clear. Examples include “helping peoples,” “a investor,” “entrepuners,” and “various kind of assist.” Phrases such as “doing effort” and “gets the same opportunity same as” are also unnatural. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the general message, but they reduce precision and sometimes interrupt reading. Learn common word partnerships for discussing wealth and support, and check spelling and word forms carefully. Replacing repeated general terms such as “help” with precise alternatives would also improve flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and more complex structures, including a conditional idea about what might happen “if they get” an investor. However, the range is limited, and complex attempts are often incomplete or inaccurately formed. The sentence beginning “if they get a investor along with his mentorship” has no main clause, while “being rich and helping peoples are both different things however…” joins ideas without appropriate punctuation. There are also recurring agreement and article errors, as in “a lot of individuals argues” and “a investor,” as well as inconsistent capitalisation after full stops. These problems sometimes make the intended relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise forming complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and review agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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