Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Many believe that one of the most important things of being rich is being able to help other people. I partially agree with the statement because being in an advantageous financial position does not only means to being helpful for others, but it also means enjoying the money according to their personal passions, such as travelling, doing shopping, eating in fancy restaurants or other experiences.

Being a wealthy individual means having a quantity of money that can be used for non-essential activities, such as donations and charities. Rich people can choose in autonomy wether to help the others or keep the funds for themselves. Some of them choose to help people who are in need, such as sick children, elderly people or homeless individuals. It is fundamental to being helpful if the opportunities are there and the person is willing to donate its earnings, but it does not means that the others should be expecting this behaviour from every rich individual.

However, other important things of being rich are that the money can be used to have numerous experiences. Therefore, financial earnings can be also used directly from this people: they have worked hard in order to gain the money, so it is understandable if they decide to keep it for themselves. For instance, a wealthy person can decide to spend the funds for a fancy dinner, instead of helping others, or to use it for travelling and exploring the world.

To conclude, I partially agree with the statement because it is important that rich people help others who are in need, but it is not mandatory, so I would not classify it as the most important feature of being wealthy, since they can also spend their money for their needs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: you partially agree, because helping others is valuable but wealth can also be used for personal enjoyment. You address both sides and support them with relevant examples, including donations to sick children or homeless people and spending on travel or dining. This gives the response a solid, relevant foundation. However, the discussion of helping others is more developed than the explanation of personal priorities, which relies mainly on examples rather than exploring why these uses might matter. The conclusion restates your view but could sharpen the distinction between an opportunity to help and the most important benefit of wealth. More balanced explanation and development would make the argument more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present contrasting considerations, and the conclusion returns to your position. Transitions such as “However,” “Therefore,” and “To conclude” help readers follow the argument. The progression is generally logical, and the examples are placed in relevant paragraphs. Some linking is mechanical, though, and a few references are not fully clear—for example, “this people” in the third paragraph does not refer naturally to the wealthy people mentioned earlier. The second body paragraph also repeats the idea that rich people may keep money for themselves without adding much explanation. Use more varied links and clearer references, and make each paragraph advance a distinct part of the reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including “advantageous financial position,” “non-essential activities,” “donations,” and “exploring the world.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and the vocabulary is generally understandable. There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural word choices and collocations, such as “a quantity of money,” “choose in autonomy,” and “spend the funds for a fancy dinner.” “Doing shopping” and “the others” are also less natural in these contexts. Such slips do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and flexibility. Aim for more idiomatic combinations and avoid repeating “money,” “help,” and “rich” when a precise alternative such as “wealth,” “support,” or “affluent people” fits.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including a reason clause with “because,” a contrast introduced by “but,” and examples introduced by “such as.” Most sentences remain understandable, and the errors rarely obscure your meaning. Some grammatical problems recur, however: “does not only means” should be “does not only mean,” “it does not means” should be “it does not mean,” and “it is fundamental to being helpful” has an awkward infinitive pattern. There are also agreement and pronoun-form issues in “this people” and “donate its earnings.” Work on verb forms after auxiliaries, singular/plural agreement, and sentence patterns after adjectives such as “fundamental.” Greater accuracy across these structures would strengthen the writing.

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