Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is argued that the advantage of being rich, few individuals belive that the greasest opportunity to helps others. I completely agree with that statement because rich people can support poor families development in society.

There are a number of reason why I believe wealthy individulals people enogh money. Firstly, rich people support the poor people consequently poor lives easier. The next reason Rich people have creat factory or garmements poor people helpful and easily to get work. Another reason, rich people can contributed to society by establishng scholl, hospitals and charitable organisations. These activities can create opportunityes for people who cannot afford basic services. As a result, society, can become more devloped and equal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

Your response takes a clear position in the opening: “I completely agree,” and gives relevant reasons, including helping poor families, creating jobs, and establishing schools and hospitals. These points show an understanding of the topic, but they are only briefly listed rather than explained with examples or consequences. The response also does not explore whether helping others is the most important benefit of wealth, as the question asks. In addition, it contains 115 words, below the required 250, so the argument is substantially incomplete. Develop each reason with a specific example and explain why the opportunity to help others outweighs other benefits of being rich.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas are presented in a recognisable order: you state your view, then introduce supporting reasons with “Firstly,” “The next reason,” and “Another reason.” This gives the reader some guidance through the response. However, the progression is limited because the points are compressed into one paragraph and are not developed into a clear argument with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Some connections are also awkward, such as “consequently poor lives easier,” which makes the relationship between the ideas unclear. Use separate paragraphs for your main reasons, connect each explanation to its claim, and finish by restating your position. This would make the organisation more complete and less list-like.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “wealthy,” “charitable organisations,” “basic services,” and “developed and equal.” These choices help communicate the general subject of your argument. However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “belive,” “greasest,” “garmements,” and “opportunityes.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “poor lives easier” and “rich people have creat factory.” Aim to learn accurate forms and natural collocations for discussing wealth, employment, and public services. More precise vocabulary, used correctly, would make your ideas clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few different sentence patterns, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a result sentence beginning “As a result.” However, most sentences are simple or incomplete, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction frequently affect clarity. For example, “rich people have creat factory” needs a correctly formed verb and plural noun, while “rich people can contributed” uses an incorrect verb form after “can.” The opening sentence is also difficult to interpret because its clauses are not joined clearly. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses such as “because” and “which.” Check that modal verbs are followed by the base form of the verb.

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