Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people are of the opinion that when you are wealthy, you have the chance to help others. I totally agree with this statement.

People, with good financial strength, have a number of opportunities where they can spent their wealth for a noble cause. One among these opportunities is to help those who are in need. A person who is well settled in the family can be an angel of god. In societies, where state is not so much serious about it's people and do not take responsibility. These people can be a great help. They can give a helping hand in happiness or in bad days. For example, I remember some examples which come from my own family. I was child and my grandfather took me to the hospital to check about his sick friend. There I saw, many people gathered my grandpa to ask for help and he was happily helping them. I remember those sigh of relief on their faces. He put some cash under the pillow of his friend too and paid some bills which was pending.

Similarly, a poor person from our village came to my father last year. He was asking for financial assistance for his daughter's wedding. My father took the responsibility of her whole wedding and her personal shopping. This was was a proud moment and I felt so satisfied and relieved that we are blessed and can be of help to our community.

So, to conclude, being rich is not only a blessing to you but a blessing to your community and people who you can assist directly or indirectly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I totally agree,” and the conclusion returns to the idea that wealth can benefit the wider community. The two personal examples—your grandfather helping his sick friend and your father supporting a family with wedding costs—are relevant and give the argument a personal, concrete basis. This meets the task well, but the response focuses mainly on examples of helping and says less about why this opportunity is the most important aspect of being rich, or whether wealth has other important benefits. The point about societies where the state does not take responsibility is also introduced but not fully explained. Develop that reasoning and connect each example more explicitly to the question’s claim.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening position, a body containing two examples, and a concluding statement. “Similarly” signals the move to the second example, while “So, to conclude” makes the ending clear. The examples are generally presented in a logical order, and the reader can follow the main message. However, the first body paragraph contains several ideas—public responsibility, community support, and the hospital story—without clear separation or transitions. The sentence beginning “In societies, where state…” is also detached from the preceding point, interrupting the flow. Use topic sentences to establish each paragraph’s purpose, and make links between the general claim and personal examples more explicit rather than relying mainly on basic signposting.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use adequate vocabulary to discuss wealth and assistance, including “financial assistance,” “noble cause,” “helping hand,” and “community.” These choices make your examples understandable, and phrases such as “sigh of relief” add some descriptive detail. There are also attempts at less common or expressive language, but some combinations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “good financial strength,” “well settled in the family,” and “an angel of god.” “Spent their wealth” is also an imprecise choice for describing charitable support. Aim for more natural collocations and precise wording, especially when expressing general arguments. This would make the vocabulary more flexible and controlled while preserving the clear meaning of your examples.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including relative clauses such as “who are in need” and “who was asking for financial assistance.” The main ideas remain understandable, but grammatical control is uneven. Examples include “they can spent” instead of a correctly formed verb, “I was child,” and “This was was a proud moment.” There are also sentence-boundary and punctuation problems: “In societies, where state is not so much serious about it's people and do not take responsibility” is an incomplete sentence, while the comma after “I saw” is unnecessary. Review verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, then proofread for repeated words. More accurate control of these patterns would strengthen the range you are already attempting.

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