Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the chance to help others.

Yes it is very significant to help needy people and poor people. I agree this statement. I will discuss this in the following paragraphs.

On the one hand, one of the most essential part in your life, if you have so much money and you are very rich, its your responsibilty to help the poor people and needy people. Rich people can help and needy people in many ways. For example, they cand give money to poor families, provide food and clothes, and help children get a good education. Many people cannot afford their basic needs because of financial problems. If wealthy people support them, the can have a better life and a bright future. This is the one of the best ways to use money.

On the other hand, rich people cand build hospitals, schools and other useful places for society. They can provide free medical treatment for poor patients and offer scholerships to students who cannot pay their school fees. If you help the both they very happy for you and you feel proud and happienes.

In my opinion, money is the very important part in your life and your bright future. If you have money you can build big houses,and many others bussniens ideas. When you become healthy help the poor and needy people.They feel happy and chance to bright their future when someone help the poor and needy people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear position—“I agree”—and give relevant examples, including financial support for families, healthcare, schools and scholarships. These points address how wealth can benefit others, but the response only partly answers the question about whether helping others is the *most important* aspect of being rich. The final paragraph shifts to personal benefits such as building houses and business ideas, without comparing these with helping others or explaining your view of their relative importance. Several ideas are also repeated or briefly stated rather than developed. The response is 237 words, so it is 13 words below the required minimum; the 15 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop the comparison and explain your position more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” signal a change in focus. Examples are generally placed near the points they support, so the reader can follow the broad topic. However, the overall progression is unclear: the second body paragraph continues the case for helping others rather than presenting a distinct opposing consideration, and the final paragraph moves to personal wealth without linking this back to the question. Repetition of “poor people and needy people” also limits the development. Some references are difficult to follow, particularly “If you help the both,” where “both” is unclear. Organise the body around distinct reasons and use clearer links between each claim and its example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate basic ideas, including “financial problems,” “basic needs,” “free medical treatment” and “scholarships.” These phrases show an attempt to discuss practical forms of support. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “poor people and needy people,” “very important part in your life,” and “many others business ideas.” Spelling errors—including “responsibilty,” “cand,” “scholerships,” “happienes” and “bussniens”—are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Choose more precise terms for people receiving support and for the benefits of wealth, and proofread spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including conditional forms such as “If wealthy people support them, the can have a better life” and a relative clause in “students who cannot pay their school fees.” This gives the response some structural variety. However, attempts at longer sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “one of the most essential part” (number agreement), “its your responsibilty” (sentence construction and possessive form), “If you help the both they very happy for you” (missing verb and unclear clause structure), and “when someone help” (subject–verb agreement). Work on complete sentence patterns, agreement, articles and punctuation, then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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