Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often said that the most significant thing regarding successfull in life and earn more money, so you gets a chance to helps other people. I largerly agree with this statement this is because you are able to helped old homes and poor children for their studies.

Firstly, being rich there is able to help poor children for studies. Most of the children can not affort the school and college fee and other expenses there they just leave their eduction. So if someone are able to provides thses things and fullfill their requriments then they may contineious studies and help to build a better nation.For instance, it is often observed that most wealthy people in the society can helped thses kind of children. This is how rish are able to do something for needed people.

secondly,wealthy people can also able to donate their money, used clothes, and other accessories for the old homes and olphan. in this world most of people have no homes where they live and even their childrens can not keep with self so they lived in the old homes.Moreover, most children have no parents so they are living in a olphan. therefore it kind of responsibilties for rish people to help them if they get a opportyunity. It is observed that people can served their serves to these kind of organizations which is prime thing to be rich.

i conclusion, being a rich is fundamental because you got a chance and abilty to help other needed people. Wealthy person can help citizens in difference ways such as helping children for their education and old people in old homes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you largely agree that wealth matters because it creates opportunities to help others. Both body paragraphs give relevant examples, focusing on children’s education and support for older people and orphans, and the conclusion restates your view. This addresses the task, but the discussion is not equally developed throughout. The education paragraph explains how financial support could help children continue studying, while the second paragraph lists donations and care homes without explaining as clearly how wealth enables this help or why it is the most important aspect of being rich. To strengthen the response, explain the significance of helping others and develop each example with a specific consequence or illustration.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “secondly,” and a conclusion. The ideas generally progress from educational support to assistance for older people and children without parents. However, connections between some sentences are mechanical or unclear. For example, “So if someone…” follows the point about school costs, but the relationship between the wealthy person’s support and the wider claim about building a better nation could be made more explicit. The second paragraph also moves quickly between homelessness, old-age homes, and orphanages. Use clearer topic sentences and link each example back to your position; check that pronouns such as “they” have an unmistakable reference.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “wealthy people,” “donate,” “education,” and “organizations,” and you attempt phrases such as “build a better nation.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “successfull in life,” “old homes,” “olphan,” and “needed people”; these are not consistently natural or precise expressions. Repetition of “help” and “people” also limits flexibility. Build a bank of accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations, for example, use “support disadvantaged children” and “donate to care homes” where appropriate. More precise wording would make your examples clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional structure in “if someone are able to provides… then they may…,” and you use sequencing clauses to explain consequences. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response and sometimes make meaning harder to follow. For instance, “you gets a chance to helps” needs consistent subject–verb agreement and infinitive forms, while “most wealthy people… can helped” uses an incorrect verb form after “can.” Some sentences also run together, as in the opening of the second body paragraph. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “if,” and “so that.”

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