Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many people belives that the biggest benefit having so much money is being ablr to help other people.While i agree on that if you have a wealth than you need to support others , but i also belive that you need to takeing care of your won life and future is also most omportant

On one hand , rich people are having powe and money that make a huge diffrence in lives of those are stuggling.With money person can donate amount for charity works, pay for any poor persons medical bills , if any student need a finacial help they can provide help .By helping students , bullding scholls, colleges and hospitals rich can creat good living expriance for others.Wealthy person always thinks in that way that he earn from this soiety and they need to give it back

On the other hand, helping other some times make them more dipendent on free bees that provided by the rich people and than they does not want to work and make them dependable.Another argument is the person is getting a help they realy diserve that help or they just benefit of another person actully need that help.most of the time most diserving people are not able to reach for facilities which needed the most.

In my conculsion, there are some negative part of helping others but positves are more than negative and wealthy people always rembers that if they help the society for good in return society give it back as the best to them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your response addresses the question and presents a clear, balanced position: you agree that wealthy people should help others, while also noting the importance of looking after one’s own life and future. The two body paragraphs give relevant reasons, including donations for medical care and education, and the risk that assistance may create dependency. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For example, the concern that recipients may not “deserve” help is not supported with an example or a clear distinction between effective and ineffective aid. The opening idea about personal security is also not developed later. To strengthen the response, explain how these considerations shape your view of what is most important about being rich.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, contrasting body paragraphs signalled by “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This makes the main line of argument reasonably easy to follow. Some connections between ideas are less clear, however: the discussion moves from dependency to whether recipients deserve help without explaining how the points relate. References such as “they” and “that help” can also leave the reader unsure who or what is meant. The conclusion repeats the general contrast but does not clearly return to the opening point about personal security. Use clearer links between each reason and your position, and make references more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “charity,” “medical bills,” “financial help,” “dependent,” and “society,” so the reader can understand the main ideas. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “building schools, colleges and hospitals.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause, as in “free bees” for “freebies,” “stuggling,” and “diserving.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, including “provide help” and “good living expriance.” Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common collocations for discussing wealth and social support; this will make your vocabulary more effective without requiring unnecessarily complex words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including conditional language in “if you have a wealth than you need to support others” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” These attempts show some range, but errors in sentence construction and verb forms are common enough to affect clarity. For example, “Many people belives” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “they does not want to work” has incorrect agreement and verb form. The opening sentence also joins ideas without clear punctuation, and “you need to takeing care” has an incorrect verb pattern. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, infinitive and gerund patterns, and sentence boundaries, then proofread each sentence for a clear grammatical structure.

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