Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

From my opinion, I agree with the statement that while being rich you have the opportunity to help others and to fulfil their needs. The rich people has the ability to think beyond their own expenses as the middle class people are busy of thinking their own needs and demands of the family.

Rich people have the tendacy to think of the charities or they seek for the NGOs that are taking care of the poor people. They give the donations to them and also help them by giving food to them. Some rich people also make the poor kids to study in the schools whcih can make them literate.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You take a clear position in the opening, agreeing that wealth creates an opportunity to help others, and your examples of donations, food, education and charities are relevant. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: it does not explain why helping others is the most important benefit of being rich, or consider other possible benefits and how they compare. The contrast with middle-class people is asserted rather than supported. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words, so there is not enough development to establish a convincing argument. To improve, explain each example, connect it directly to the question of importance, and develop your position across several paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic, understandable order: it states your view and then gives examples of ways wealthy people may help. The second paragraph stays focused on charitable actions, so the reader can follow the main topic. However, the essay is very short and has only two paragraphs, with little progression from one idea to the next. Connections between claims are limited, and the contrast between rich and middle-class people is not developed or linked clearly to the examples. Use a fuller paragraph structure, with one main point per paragraph, and connect ideas with clear references and transitions such as “For example” and “This matters because.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “charities,” “NGOs,” “donations,” and “literate,” which makes the general topic clear. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “fulfil their needs.” However, the vocabulary range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, including “the tendacy to think of the charities” and “make the poor kids to study.” Spelling errors such as “tendacy” and “whcih” are noticeable. Build a wider range for discussing wealth and social responsibility, and check spelling and natural word combinations. For instance, you could describe people as “supporting charitable organisations” or “providing children with access to education.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate your main position using simple sentences and make an attempt at a more complex opening with “while being rich.” However, the range of structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect fluency. Examples include “The rich people has,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “the middle class people are busy of thinking,” where the sentence pattern is faulty. The phrase “make the poor kids to study” also shows difficulty forming a verb pattern. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and common structures such as “help someone do something” or “enable someone to do something.” Then combine simple sentences with controlled complex sentences to explain causes and results.

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