Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people believe that if someone is wealthy, the most essential thing about this is that he has the opportunity to help poor or needy citizens. According to me, if a person is rich and have enough money to help others, this is a golden chance for him to earn respect by helping people who are financially broken or need some other kind of help.

Being a rich person in society is a blessing by god and along with this we have many responsibilities given by god. Such responsibilities may includes helping needy individuals in any way which leads to the peace of heart and happiness. Being rich by heart is as important as being wealthy so i agree that most of the people in community is wealthy but people who are rich by heart are less. Some wealthy citizens are fond of helping others, because of such people other members of the community spend their lives more comfortably and tension free.

On the other hand, if a person get help of others again and again, he will not even try to support himself by his own and in this way he become lazy. Today, in many countries specially in South Asian nations there are a lot of beggars seeking for the help of healthy people in the society. In fact mostly the people are physically fit and are able to work by themselves but they don't. I think that helping these people is not a good deal because begging is an occupation of such individuals.

In conclusion, i shortly say that if a person is wealthy and have enough money to help others, he should help only needy people not beggars.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that wealth creates an opportunity and responsibility to help, while distinguishing people in genuine need from those you believe can work. The response addresses both the value of helping and a possible drawback of repeated assistance, so the main ideas are relevant. However, the discussion of beggars takes up much of the opposing point and is asserted broadly rather than supported with explanation; the claim that assistance makes people lazy would benefit from qualification or an example. The idea of helping people in other ways is mentioned but not developed. To strengthen the response, explain more fully why helping others is the most important benefit of wealth, while acknowledging other possible benefits or responsibilities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, the body paragraphs present reasons and a counterpoint, and the conclusion restates your position. Paragraphing helps the reader follow this progression, and transitions such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” signal changes in direction. Some connections are less clear or feel mechanical, however. For example, “Being rich by heart is as important as being wealthy” introduces a related idea without explaining how it supports the main argument, and the shift from helping needy people to rejecting help for beggars is abrupt. Use clearer links between claims and examples, and make references such as “such people” more precise so the reader can follow exactly who or what you mean.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of relevant vocabulary, including “responsibilities,” “financially,” “community,” and “physically fit,” and your meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “a golden chance” and “rich by heart,” but these are not always natural or precise in this context. Several choices are awkward or overly broad, including “financially broken,” “a good deal,” and “healthy people” when you mean people who are able to work. Repetition of “help,” “people,” and “rich” also limits flexibility. Aim for more precise collocations and vary key terms, for example by using “provide assistance,” “wealthy individuals,” or “people in genuine need.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if a person get help … he will not even try” and a relative clause in “people who are financially broken.” The overall meaning remains clear, but some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation reduce accuracy. Examples include “if a person is rich and have,” “responsibilities may includes,” “a person get help,” and “he become lazy”; these require consistent subject–verb agreement and verb forms. Capitalise “I” throughout, and use commas to separate introductory phrases where needed. Review agreement and conditional patterns, then proofread each sentence for a matching subject and verb. More accurate control of these forms would make your varied sentence structures easier to read.

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