Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, many people think that being reach may help others come easily. Although the proportion of rich and poor people is not well balanced, the ability of rich people help others may useful to make equitable distribution of wealth. More and more people are getting helped by rich people around them.

Some view that rich man will, of course, make them have the opportunities to help others in need. Some governments in the world sometimes facilitate this thesis by taxing more rich people and subsidizing the poor ones. Other initiatives also conducted such as charity programmes and crowdfunding programmes, especially when disastrous events happened in some countries like major floods, earthquakes, tsunamis, and so on.

Meanwhile, some may view that being rich does not necessarily means poor people will be helped right away. Certain rich people have the ambitions to get richer and richer by the time they have more opportunities to come. They become greedy and more people suffered by that. They avoid any taxes, move their wealth to other countries, and hide it. Sometimes, their donation almost relatively nothing compare to the number of poor people around them. Governments should concern about this, because it will make the chaos in some countries due to the protest about wealth distribushould be addresed soon.

I believe being rich makes us powerful enough to help others in urgently needed. Moreoever, helping people before we are getting rich is the most humble practices. However, when we have the opportunities, we need to avoid greediness and try to help more poor people around us by any variant of donation activities. Helping each other in communities will make the vibe become peaceful and warm.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address the central question by discussing how wealth can enable assistance, while also noting that some wealthy people prioritise personal gain. Your final paragraph makes your position broadly clear: being rich creates the power to help, but people should act generously. Examples such as taxation, charity programmes, and disaster relief are relevant. However, the response does not consistently explain whether helping others is the *most important* aspect of being rich, as opposed to one benefit among others. The point about governments taxing the wealthy also shifts attention from an individual’s opportunity to help. Develop your main position more directly and explain how each example supports your view; some ideas, particularly the claim that helping before becoming rich is humbler, need clarification.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The contrast signalled by “Meanwhile” helps distinguish the argument that wealth can support others from the concern that it may encourage greed. The examples are generally grouped with the relevant point, so the overall arrangement is coherent. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the discussion moves from taxation to charity and crowdfunding without explaining their relationship, and the third paragraph’s final sentence about protests is difficult to follow. Some linking phrases, including “More and more” and “However,” feel mechanical or do not clearly express the intended connection. Use clearer topic sentences and make each example’s link to the main argument explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “equitable distribution of wealth,” “subsidizing,” “crowdfunding,” and “donation activities.” These choices show an effort to discuss social and economic issues beyond basic terms. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling sometimes make the meaning unclear or unnatural. For example, “being reach” appears to mean “being rich,” “the vibe become peaceful” is too informal for this essay, and “donation almost relatively nothing” does not express the intended comparison clearly. There are also spelling errors such as “Moreoever” and “distribushould.” Aim for precise, natural phrases such as “make a meaningful contribution” and “reduce wealth inequality,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a concession in “Although the proportion of rich and poor people is not well balanced” and a conditional idea in “when we have the opportunities.” Most of the argument remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “the ability of rich people help others may useful” needs an infinitive and a linking verb, while “does not necessarily means” has incorrect verb agreement after “does.” Other examples include “rich man will … make them have” and “more people suffered,” where the sentence structure or tense is not controlled. Practise accurate verb patterns, articles, and agreement, then proofread each sentence to ensure its subject and verb match.

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