Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

some people think the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to support others. i strongly agree to helping to oter when you are rich and helping poor families and students. I discuess further about in this eassy

being wealthy is good opportunity to help other poor people or families.

wealthy people should support who induviduls they dont have enough money to survive , they support in medical care , in pakistan most of the children dont go to school because they dont have mony to pay school fee and academic fees so they are going to do odd jobs like cleaning or mechanic workshops wealthy people must should care that type of people

wealthy people must pay children fee or other acdemic expenses and food

wealthy people also must should charity for medical car or hospital because some time people have faced a serious medical probled or some dangerious issues such as cancer or live and heart transplant poor people dont have to much money for his treatment so people slow and steady going to death .

even if the person have faced dental issues but they dont have extra mony for his treatment they

in my opinion wealthy people must do charity to poor people and support that types of familes and orphan children for his studies

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that wealthy people should help others, and you give relevant examples involving school fees, food and medical care in Pakistan. However, the response addresses the topic only partially because these examples are listed rather than explained in depth, and the opening promise to discuss the issue further is not followed by a developed argument. The final opinion repeats your main point without adding a conclusion about why this is the most important benefit of wealth. The response contains 210 words, so it is 40 words below the required minimum; 14 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop one or two examples with clearer explanations and consequences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall shape: an introduction, supporting points about education and healthcare, and a final statement of opinion. The examples are generally relevant and follow a sensible order. However, progression is difficult to follow because the body is presented as one long block, with few clear links between ideas. Repeated wording such as “wealthy people must” makes the argument feel list-like, while “even if the person have faced dental issues…” is left unfinished and interrupts the flow. Use separate paragraphs for each main reason, complete every sentence, and add simple, accurate links such as “For example” or “As a result” to show how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “wealthy,” “medical care,” “school fee,” “charity” and “orphan children,” so the reader can identify your main concerns. However, the vocabulary range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response harder to understand, such as “oter,” “induv iduls,” “mony,” “probled” and “dangerious.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “do charity” and “going to death.” Aim to learn accurate collocations for education and healthcare, and check spelling carefully. More precise wording would help you explain the needs of disadvantaged people without relying on repeated general terms such as “people” and “support.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and examples in longer sentences, particularly when describing children who cannot afford school and people who need treatment. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts to combine several ideas often produce frequent grammatical errors that can make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “wealthy people should support who…” lacks a clear object and clause structure, while “some time people have faced” and “the person have faced” show problems with verb forms and subject–verb agreement. The unfinished sentence beginning “even if” also leaves the relationship between ideas unclear. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join them with conjunctions, checking agreement, articles and punctuation.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.