Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this statement illustrate about that people being rich it's not easy being rich some told that the main crucial thing about became rich is that individual has the opportunity to assigns others

In my point this statement was not sure I am agree this statement.

In the one hand, many of people believe that we can help other we will became rice . When the people has a rice it's about his are him hard work moreover skills he are she used correct ways additional the person have decision maker they can became rice in present days.for instance the person became rice they used technology are smart work in perfect place are time recently we saw the Ambani he was a richest man in the top 10 world . He was invest on technology at network ,gases, petrolum etc.

Sub sequence, we can used right concept when ee can became rice and also we can assign the other people in danger situation they may be help in we bad situation this is known as relationship .in my opinion this statement was crucial to being rice I will agree this statement but include we have problem solve capacity to dare the problem in your real life.

Conclusion, it's right to assign to other in critical situation it's develop to being rice in thus present days Significantly plays in help to others in this lives this is best concept to became rice ..

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to fully address the prompt. While you attempt to discuss the relationship between wealth and helping others, the position is unclear and inconsistent. You state you are 'not sure' and then agree, but the arguments provided are disjointed and do not directly answer the extent to which you agree. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which limits the development of your ideas. To improve, ensure you clearly state your position in the introduction and provide well-developed, relevant arguments in each paragraph that directly relate to the prompt's focus on the moral or social responsibility of the wealthy.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are often confusing or missing. For example, the use of 'Sub sequence' and 'In the one hand' is misused, making it difficult to follow your train of thought. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and often incorrectly, which disrupts the flow of the text. To improve, focus on using simple, clear linking words like 'firstly', 'however', and 'consequently' to connect your sentences and paragraphs logically. Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is limited and contains frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'rice' instead of 'rich', 'assigns' instead of 'assist', and 'petrolum'. These errors often impede communication, as the reader has to guess your intended meaning. You rely on a very basic range of words and struggle to use them in the correct context. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling and usage of common academic vocabulary. Try to expand your range by practicing collocations related to wealth, society, and philanthropy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that make it difficult to understand your points. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the person have decision maker'), sentence structure, and article usage. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. The majority of your sentences contain errors, which significantly affects readability. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction—subject, verb, and object—before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for basic errors like verb tense consistency and pluralization will also help.

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