Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.5)
RING THATS ONCE I BOUGHT YES THIS IS A RING THAT ONE I LIKED TO MUCH AND I LIKED TO WEARD IN MY BIRTHDAY PARTY BUT I COULD NOT WEAR THIS BECOUSE SOMEONE HAD STOLEN MY RING I WOULD NOT WEAR THIS ON MY BIRTHDAY PARTY THIS RING I KEEPT IN MY CUPBOARD AND I WENT TO SHOPPING FOR MY DRESS AND IN MY HOUSE ONLY WAS MY MAID SHE WAS CLEANING MY HOUSE AND I THINK SHE HAD STOLEN MY RING BECOUSE I FORGOT THE KEY OF MY CUPBOARD BECOUSE I WENT MARKET SUDDENLY AND LOT OFF THING IN MY MIND RELATED TO BIRTHDAY PARTY AND NEVER MY MAID DID LIKE THIS SO FIRST TIME SHE HAD STOLE ANYTHING I REMEMBER THIS ONE IS MY RING BECOUSE I LIKE RED STONE AND SAME LIKE STONE LIKE MY RING I WANT TO GO SHOPMEN WITH BRING THIS RING AND WANT TO ASK SHOPMAN
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for an opinion on whether the most important aspect of being wealthy is the opportunity to help others. Instead, the student has written a personal narrative about a stolen ring. Furthermore, the response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement. Because the content does not address the task question at all, it fails to meet the requirements for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The text lacks logical organization and paragraphing. It is written as a single, long, run-on sentence without punctuation, which makes it extremely difficult to follow the narrative. There is a total absence of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the progression of the story is disjointed and confusing. The lack of structure prevents the reader from identifying any clear logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, consisting primarily of simple, everyday words. There are numerous errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'weard' instead of 'wear', 'becouse' instead of 'because', and 'shopmen' instead of 'shopkeeper'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas or to address the topic of wealth and social responsibility, which the prompt requires.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The grammar is highly problematic. The entire response is one long run-on sentence, lacking any full stops, commas, or capital letters to demarcate sentences. There are frequent errors in verb tense (e.g., 'I keept', 'she had stole'), word order, and sentence structure. The lack of basic punctuation and the inability to form coherent, grammatically correct sentences significantly impede communication throughout the text.
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