Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THERE ARE BILLOINS OF PEOPLE IN THE WORLD AND EACH PEOPLE HAVE THIER PERSONAL OPPNION FOR BEING RICH AND ALSO TO HOW TO SPEND THIER MONEY. HOWEVER I AM AGREE WITH THE STATMENT THAT BEING RICH IS THAT ONE HAS THE OPPORTINITY TO HELP OTHRS.
ACCORDING TO MY VIEW BEING RICH IS THE BLESSING OF GOD NOT ONLY THE BLESSING BUT ALSO HARD WORK . BUT I BELEIVE THAT IF WE RICH WE HAVE THE ENOUGH MONEY TO SPEND OUR LIFE AS WE WANT BUT IF WE HAVE MONEY HAVE TO DONATE SOME LITTLE BEAT AMOUNT OF THEM TO THE PEOPLE WHO REALLY WANT MONEY TO SURVIVE.SOME PEOPLE DO NIT HAVE EVEN MONEY FOR FOOD SO JUST I THINK IF THE PEOLE ARE RICH THEY JUST DONATE SOME FOOD OR OR SOMEHITNG CLOTHES TO POOR GUY.
RICH PEOPLE WHO ALREDY MAKE THEIR LIFE AS PER THIER REQIRTMNET THEY HAVE TO DO SOMTHING FOR POOR PEOPLE .THERE ARE SO MUCH PUBLIC ORGANIZATION FOR PEOPLE WHO DO HONEST WORK FOR THEM THEY ALWAYS BE READY TO DO FOR POOR PEOPLE .IF RICH PEOLE DONT HAVE ENOUGH TIME TO GIVE FOOD OR SOMETHING ELSE THINGS TO POOR PEOLE PERONALLY THEY HAVE TO GIVE THAT MONEY TO THE ORGANIZATION THEY FEED THEM.
TO CONCLUSION THE EVERY CAPALBE PERSON HAVE TO HELP EVERY OR EACH PERSON ON THEIR EVERY CRITICAL SITUATION .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The essay addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position on the importance of helping others when wealthy. However, the response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which limits the depth of the argument. The ideas are somewhat repetitive, focusing primarily on donating food or money to organizations without exploring other facets of the topic, such as the responsibility of wealth or the impact of philanthropy. The development is basic, and the conclusion is very brief. To improve, you should expand your arguments with specific examples or hypothetical scenarios to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive discussion of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and often mechanical. For example, the transition 'ACCORDING TO MY VIEW' is used somewhat awkwardly, and the connection between sentences is often abrupt. There is a lack of varied linking words to guide the reader through your arguments. To improve, try using a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your ideas more fluidly. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to improve the overall logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'BILLOINS', 'THIER', 'OPPNION', 'OPPORTINITY', and 'REQIRTMNET'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on simple words like 'money', 'rich', and 'people' throughout the text. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items and more precise collocations. Focusing on accurate spelling and using synonyms to avoid repetition will significantly improve your score in this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'each people have'), incorrect word order, and missing articles (e.g., 'to poor guy'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper capitalization or containing unnecessary spaces. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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