Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Myriad individual reckon that if you affluent then you have a chance to assist others in ample measures so it is crucial thing.I agree with this notion because some people just have amenity finance to get success as talent in their blood.I will discuss my views in the subsequent paragraphs.
There are enormous benefits to an ordinary man as wealthy help them. Firstly, economy of nation will boost as talented and well educated contributes in society. On the top of it, offensive would be decreased as they can fulfil their fundamental needs.people can have a safe ,happy society. Therefore, country can get more efficient environment and effective work productivity.
Some masses think that in every city a few masses that can not want do work just like take money from richer people so they wastes their money. They have not invest money for their job or in learn skill .Spoil money in drug trafficking. Apart from it, sometimes poor folks know that they can get money without doing any work,So they have not to need to face any kind of obstacle.On the other hand , not every underprivileged person is addictive also not all are free. some people only need for help to achieve goals. A cricketer Ram is great example of this.He belongs to a poor family.As he has talent Dev helped a lot.Now he is famous cricketer in team .
In conclusion, from my perspective, economy of country would be increased as society has talented man in front of nation for growth rather then merely rich with money without well qualification.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt, but the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you state your position clearly in the introduction, the supporting arguments are often underdeveloped or lack logical clarity. For instance, the transition from the economic benefits of wealth to the counter-argument about dependency is abrupt. The example of 'a cricketer Ram' is relevant but lacks sufficient detail to fully support the argument. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-explained point that directly relates to the prompt. Avoid generalizations and provide more concrete, logical links between the act of helping and the resulting societal impact.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'In conclusion', but others are used incorrectly or awkwardly, such as 'On the top of it, offensive would be decreased'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. To improve, focus on using transition words that logically connect your ideas rather than just acting as signposts. Ensure that each sentence builds naturally upon the previous one to create a smoother progression of thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'amenity finance' instead of 'financial resources' and 'offensive' instead of 'crime'. Some phrases are non-idiomatic, such as 'Myriad individual reckon'. While you attempt to use more academic vocabulary, the lack of precision often hinders clarity. To reach a higher band, focus on learning common collocations and using words in their correct context. Expanding your range of vocabulary and ensuring accurate usage will significantly improve the impact of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('economy of nation will boost'), missing articles ('as talented and well educated contributes'), and awkward sentence structures ('they have not to need to face'). While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often marred by errors in syntax or punctuation. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures before attempting more complex ones. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles, pluralization, and verb tense consistency will help you achieve a higher level of accuracy.
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