Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people believe that most significant thing of rich man is to always have a resources to help others. I am partially agree with this concepts.
Rich means not to assist everyone, if a person have good communication skills and business strategies, he will find the success. Economy growth is not directly related to the helping other. People should consider other factors and strengths of a wealthy person. For instance, hardworking man always get reward and this this add to his wealth.
Furthermore, people who first fulfil their own needs and then distribute the extras. These people just want to remove extra things from their homes to buy new once.
On the other hand, people rich in character, People who has the chance to help others, it means you have rich in something it can be intelligence or wealth. Some communities in a need of some thing but you have an opportunity to fulfil it means you have resources and you are rich. for instance, many people like sharing and they always try to denote some thing whatever they have. However, it can be a food, gadgets or clothing. They believe if we spend more we will get more.
In conclusion, Growth of a person not directly connected with others. A man who are always willing to help others we can say him rich.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address the prompt, the arguments are underdeveloped and often lack clarity. For example, your point about 'economy growth' is not clearly linked to the prompt's focus on the moral or social implications of wealth. The position is partially stated, but the supporting arguments are fragmented and do not fully explore the extent of your agreement. To improve, you must expand on your reasoning with more specific examples and ensure that every paragraph directly supports your central thesis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression between ideas is often weak. Transitions are sometimes used, such as 'Furthermore' and 'On the other hand', but they do not always effectively connect the preceding thought to the next. Some sentences are disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. For instance, the transition from discussing 'hardworking man' to 'people rich in character' is abrupt. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would greatly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'rich', 'people', and 'help', which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'denote some thing' (likely meaning 'donate') and 'buy new once' (likely meaning 'ones'). To achieve a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and collocations related to the topic of wealth, philanthropy, and social responsibility. Focusing on accurate word forms and spelling is also essential for clarity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'a person have' instead of 'a person has', and 'people who has' instead of 'people who have'. Additionally, there are errors with articles ('the most significant thing') and sentence structure, such as 'I am partially agree' instead of 'I partially agree'. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often marred by these errors. You need to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading to eliminate these recurring mistakes.
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