Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This topic is the most debated one among people. People being rich has many perks. Some people argue that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. I strongly agree to this statement and believe in helping the one in need.

In my perspective being rich is a blessing where there is a way to financially help one another. In today's economy everything is dealt with money. Many under privileged children could use the help of rich and seek education from schools and colleges. And, many orphanages and old age homes can be supported with their money. So many lives can be saved with a little financial help from the rich. There are many any sectors like healthcare, education, transportation which poor people can not afford to pay. Little help from the rich might change poor people's life.

Many different organisations and charities must be set up so that the privileged one can help the one in need. Moreover, India is one of the countries where the rich are becoming more richer and the lower middle class are becoming more poor. Rich people could use the oppurtunity to help everyone who need it.

In conclusion, I strongly condemn and agree that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. People helping people is the most beautiful thing to ever experience. And rich people have the privilege to do that. Most of our countries problems can be resolved if people helped one another.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. The ideas are relevant, focusing on the potential for the wealthy to support education, healthcare, and social welfare. However, the development is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. For instance, the argument about India is a specific example but is not fully integrated into the broader discussion of why helping others is the 'most important' aspect of wealth. To improve, you should explore counter-arguments or provide more nuanced analysis of why this specific benefit outweighs others, such as personal freedom or influence, to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a basic progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Many', 'And', 'So'). The transition between sentences could be smoother; for example, the jump from discussing general charity to the specific situation in India feels abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing is precise would help the flow of the essay significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the message to be conveyed clearly. You use some relevant topic-specific terms like 'under privileged', 'orphanages', and 'charities'. However, the range is limited, and there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'condemn and agree' (which is contradictory) and 'more richer' (a grammatical error affecting lexical precision). To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary and ensure that collocations are natural and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'the rich are becoming more richer' (incorrect comparative structure), 'the privileged one' (should be plural), and 'everyone who need it' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is also inconsistent in places. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and comparative structures, and aim for more error-free complex sentences.

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