Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This topic is about being rich for helping poor and showing our opinion about that. The main problem is becoming rich. Because when you become rich then you will help the poor. I saw many people who were rich and they have a lot of money but they does not have any interest for giving money to help other. Some rich people helps others with money but I saw that mostly rich people deny for helping others. My prospective is that if you have money and you are rich you should must help others. This will increases your money because as a Muslim if you gives money to the needy god will give you the more. Most of my family members like my brother, sister and uncle they are rich and they donates money between needy and poor people. It is very good habit and I think that everyone with a lot of money should help others. God will also become happy from you and he will return more that you give. I saw many people that are rich but they become poor because they are lazy for helping others and they dont like poor people that they have money . They more you help others the more god will happy and he will give you double then that you donates. Inshallah when i will becomes rich i will help every needy people because I know that god will gives me more then that i donates. So the moral of that discussion is do
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion that being rich provides an opportunity to help others. However, the development is limited and repetitive. The argument relies heavily on personal anecdotes and religious perspectives rather than exploring the broader societal or economic implications of wealth and philanthropy. The essay lacks a formal structure, such as an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which prevents a more nuanced exploration of the topic. The final sentence is incomplete, indicating a failure to fully conclude the discussion. While the position is clear, the ideas are not sufficiently extended to meet higher band requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks paragraphing, which is a significant issue for coherence. The ideas are presented in a single block, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the argument. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'this will'), they are often used repetitively or incorrectly. The logical flow is hindered by the lack of clear transitions between the personal examples and the general argument. The essay ends abruptly without a proper conclusion, further impacting the overall coherence of the piece.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple words like 'rich', 'poor', 'money', and 'help'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or an awareness of collocation. Some word choices are inaccurate, such as 'my prospective' instead of 'my perspective' and 'donates money between' instead of 'donates money to'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range is limited and does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. The repetition of phrases like 'help others' and 'god will give you' limits the lexical variety.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'he does not have', 'this will increases', 'if you gives'), verb tense consistency, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain errors in basic syntax. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the lack of complex sentence structures limits the grammatical range. While the intended meaning is usually understandable, the high frequency of errors across the text prevents it from reaching a higher band.
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