Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people think, if we are rich so, we have good opportunities to help other people, who have the most need of money and other types of help also. I fully agree with this idea because if we have enough money so we should help to poor people.

Firstly, if rich people give their some least money to poor people so, their living standard can improve because sometimes, poor people have not enough money for purchase things, which use in their daily life. For example, poor people do not afford daily life groceries for their home so if rich people give money to them so they can purchase goods for their home and survive easily.

Secondly, rich people have lots of money so they can give donation in charities, hospital or other organisation who serve for disable and poor people. So, organisation can provide facilities for disable people and they also provide food for them. However, if rich people do not give direct help to poor people so they can give donation in organisation and charities. For example, In India, lots of charities and organisation available for disable or poor people so , some wealthy people can not provide direct money to poor or disable people so they give huge amount of donation to organisation.

In my opinion, if we help to poor or disable people so their living standard can improve. Also, they get well facilities from organisation like, well education, good health services, transportation and food also.

In conclusion, wealthy people able to help other people so they should give money to poor or disable people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of the idea that wealth provides an opportunity to help others. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive. The arguments focus primarily on providing money for basic needs and supporting charities, which are relevant but could be expanded with more nuanced perspectives or examples to reach a higher band. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the main points. To improve, ensure that each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-developed point rather than restating the same concept of 'giving money' in different ways.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' are used to signal the structure. However, the use of these devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Additionally, there are issues with referencing and sentence-level cohesion, such as the awkward phrasing 'if we are rich so, we have good opportunities'. While the overall arrangement is coherent, the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors and limited variety in linking words.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. The student relies on basic terms like 'poor people', 'give money', and 'good opportunities'. There are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'well facilities' instead of 'adequate facilities' or 'good amenities'. The repetition of simple phrases limits the ability to convey more complex ideas. To improve, the student should aim to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms and collocations related to philanthropy, socioeconomic status, and social welfare.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Common issues include incorrect article usage (e.g., 'give donation in charities'), subject-verb agreement, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'if rich people give their some least money'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence structure and article usage would be highly beneficial.

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