Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some argue that the most significant aspect of being rich is that individuals have the opportunity to support others.

Overall, Helping the needy ones is a good habit no matter how rich or how middle class you are. It's our part of society as well that we should must also look up for those who are in need of food, clothes, money.

Although, rich people have more resources other than a normal person. they can build hospitals, schools for free. Likewise, Bill Gates foundation provides vaccines to poor countries who can't afford much. but for middle class, they only give small donations.

On the other hand, it is not necessary to being rich for helping others. Giving time, blood, teaching skills are part of help too. A teacher can also teach in free without charging any fee. So, every one have opportunity to help. Quality or Quantity does not matter.

From my perspective, if somebody have a lot to spend. They must help those who are actually deserving. but no need to show off that you are supporting anyone and giving anything.

For instance, nowadays on social media most of the influencers are also capturing these things which causes a negative impact for others too.

The ability to help is not exclusive to the wealthy. Individuals can facilitate others in many ways.

In conclusion, while wealth provide a greater opportunities to support others on a large scale, the act of helping should not be limited to the rich. Everyone has a responsibility to contribute to society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the role of wealth in helping others and providing a personal perspective. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide examples like the Bill Gates foundation, the discussion on the middle class and the role of social media influencers is a bit disjointed and lacks depth. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed argument that directly supports your thesis. You have a clear position, but the connection between the 'opportunity to help' and the 'responsibility to help' could be more explicitly linked to the prompt's focus on wealth.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate. For example, starting sentences with 'Although,' or 'Likewise,' without proper clause structure creates awkward transitions. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'They must help those who are actually deserving,' where the antecedent for 'They' is slightly ambiguous. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each sentence flows logically from the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on simple phrasing like 'good habit' and 'not necessary to being rich.' There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'facilitate others' (which is usually used for processes rather than people) and 'teach in free.' To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to social responsibility and philanthropy, such as 'altruism,' 'socio-economic status,' or 'philanthropic endeavors.'

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('every one have opportunity'), article usage ('the Bill Gates foundation'), and sentence fragments ('but for middle class, they only give small donations'). Additionally, punctuation errors, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters after a period or misusing commas, are present. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are punctuated correctly to avoid fragments.

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