Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In today's society, important thing being rich opportunity to help other. Some people believe that important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others.in this essay, I will explain why I not agree this statement with the help of examples to support my opinion l.
Firstly, some people think that main reason to people are rich because they help others this is not actually true. For instance, any one are rich this is not compulsory they are give money to help people the only reason they are rich because they are hardworking. Moreover, many people are rich but they are misor they not invest money in these kinds of things. Therefore, it is clear that this opinion is not actually true everyone is not the same thinking.
Additionally, some people think that help the poor people to purpose of richness but this reason is not actually true.on the other hand some people think that this is not the true way ever person are rich they are very passionate to about ou work and to build our self at own hard word. As a result, this is not actually true every rich person are very hardworking and love our work and focus the target.for example, if anyone are rich but no donate our money.
In conclusion, while it is true that some people think to help other this opinion is not actually bad but this is the wrong argument because everyone rich our hardworking and love our work. Therefore, i strongly disagree with this statement because there is the not right opinion.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt, but the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While you clearly state your disagreement, the supporting arguments are underdeveloped and lack logical depth. For example, you argue that rich people are only rich because they are 'hardworking,' but this point is not expanded upon to explain why this precludes the opportunity to help others. The essay relies on generalizations rather than providing specific, well-reasoned examples. To improve, focus on exploring the nuances of the topic and ensuring that each paragraph contributes a distinct, well-supported point that directly relates to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear due to grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly,' 'Moreover,' and 'In conclusion,' they are often used mechanically or in contexts where the sentence structure is too broken to support the transition. The referencing is frequently confusing, such as in the phrase 'this is not actually true everyone is not the same thinking,' which makes it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. Improving sentence structure will naturally enhance the flow and coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic words like 'rich,' 'people,' and 'true.' There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'misor' (miser) and 'at own hard word' (hard work). Some phrases are unintelligible, which hinders communication. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise, academic terms and ensure that words are used in their correct context. Focus on learning collocations—words that naturally go together—rather than just individual vocabulary items.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede meaning. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'any one are rich'), sentence fragments, and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple and often incorrectly constructed, which prevents the use of a wider range of complex forms. For instance, 'everyone rich our hardworking' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. To improve, you must focus on the basics of sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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