Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many people believe that the most crucial thing to be rich is that a individual has the opportunity to help other people. Yes, i believe that being wealthy has been an added advantage compare to being poor. I have further elaborated in the following paragraph with the both point agree and disagree.

People who are reach adds value to the society. This individual often donate money for the development of the society and built social groups to help the poor or middle class people. For example , Mukesh ambani donates millions of rupees to temple, hospitals, schools and colleges to develop infrastructure.

Furthermore, they also contribute to the country economy. Whether individual is professional or entrepreneur will invest money in the country to purchase property, pay taxes to the country. To illustrate that, Tata group is investing heavly in india which contribute to the national economy and also gives employment to large number of people.

To the contradictory, it is often believe that rich people has ego and they disrespect privilege people. All the rich person are not some but because of some individual, all the middle class people think they always disobey to them. For example, it is often seen that many actors and actress they don’t respect their fans and many times this famous personality push the fan away and slap them this thing comes in the media.

To conclude, i strongly agree that rich people helps other. People by donating and building infrastructure but with that some of them having ego issues and disrespect low income people

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the role of wealth in helping others. However, the development is somewhat uneven. While you provide relevant examples like the Tata group and Mukesh Ambani, the counter-argument regarding the 'ego' of the wealthy is less effectively linked to the core prompt about the 'opportunity to help'. The position is clear, but the analysis lacks depth in places, particularly in the conclusion, which simply restates the points rather than synthesising them. To reach a higher band, ensure that every paragraph directly relates back to the central question of whether helping others is the 'most important' aspect of being rich.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'For example', and 'To conclude' to link ideas. However, the transition between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'All the rich person are not some but because of some individual'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the flow and logical progression of your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'reach' instead of 'rich', 'country economy' instead of 'national economy', and 'disrespect privilege people' instead of 'disrespect underprivileged people'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'infrastructure' and 'entrepreneur', the range is limited. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that word forms (nouns vs. adjectives) are used correctly in context. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic synonyms will also help.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('rich people has ego', 'rich people helps other') and article usage errors ('in india', 'to the country'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and consistent proofreading for small grammatical slips will significantly improve your score.

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