Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

To be honest, I would disagree. People around the globel has different mind set. I believe being rich or poor does not matter specifically when it comes to help someone. If you are waiting to become rich and then going to help others will not take you anywhere its more conventional mind-set. Either you ar poor or elite, you must step forward to help others no matter what it takes. Point to add, you can help other under your resources. To be specific, when people gets money in pocket, first thought which comes in mind is how one can be get more better in terms of living standrads. Apparentlly, intention plays important role towards how you wants to innovate the world and how you can make trasnsform the meaning of ''Help''. Whereas, if you wants to help more people and draw a dream to open NGO, it will defintely takes a lot of resources which ultimately needs the Money being a rich person. According to my perspective, you don't comply with barrier to help others. It is important but totally helping other after being rich is not the true. On the other hand ,becoming the rich is your opportunity to make yourself generous and kind enough to help those who are really seeking for help. Spiting facts, It's a fair tarde with God, if you help the human kind the God will give you more in your tresury. Opportunities does not come itself, one has to biuld them in any situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against the idea that being rich is the most important factor in helping others. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you attempt to explain that helping is a matter of intention rather than wealth, the argument becomes somewhat contradictory when you later acknowledge that large-scale help, such as opening an NGO, requires significant financial resources. The ideas are presented, but the logical flow is hampered by a lack of depth and some confusion in the reasoning. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported point that directly reinforces your overall stance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks clear paragraphing, which makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. The text is presented as a single block, which is a significant weakness in terms of structure. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Whereas' and 'On the other hand', their usage is sometimes mechanical or incorrectly placed, such as starting a sentence with 'Point to add'. The logical flow between sentences is often interrupted by abrupt shifts in thought, such as the sudden mention of 'Spiting facts' and 'trade with God'. Improving the use of transition signals and organizing the essay into distinct paragraphs would greatly enhance the clarity of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'globel' (global), 'mind set' (mindset), 'trasnsform' (transform), 'tresury' (treasury), and 'biuld' (build). You attempt some more complex vocabulary, such as 'innovate' and 'generous', but the overall control is weak. The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'Spiting facts' (likely meaning 'spitting facts' or 'speaking facts') and 'fair tarde with God'. To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and using words in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('People... has', 'people gets', 'it will... takes'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'If you are waiting to become rich and then going to help others will not take you anywhere its more conventional mind-set.' The control over complex structures is limited, and errors are present in almost every sentence. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high density of errors requires the reader to work too hard to follow your points. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement.

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