Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this World everyone think like that, if some one have extra money or he is rich he must need to spend their money in chearity, I convinsed with this noution because in your funeral your hand is emty.

I'm not just agree with that i'm also put my all money in such school of thought, the question is that if you have money, How you spend it? may be you say" full fill your requirment" my next question is, then? you may say "for family" in last must agree with me, it's your responsibulity to must do some this for the other people, it's totaly on you how much you want to make big for them.

I don't say anything for others, what ever I do? I'm reposible for that. So, that's my "Plan" may be it hapend or not but I will do it. " Make a hospital for heart realted issues where the price of tests that cost in private more than 100$ but in my hospital it's cost is less than 1$ beacue a ECG meachen cost of perform one test is 0.20$ and if I take 0.90$ then I'm also in profit and that's also spend money for others.

In my opinion "Spend Money" for others doesn't mean to gave you all money to tem, It also to do some impotant like hospital, food of best quailty in less price, medicen in lesser price and their are meny more, you just want to do, because in Quran Allah says which summary that "If you spend money for others, Allah gives you 10s time more"

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing agreement with the idea that helping others is a key aspect of being wealthy. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat informal. The essay relies on personal anecdotes and rhetorical questions rather than a structured, academic exploration of the topic. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments are underdeveloped and lack the depth expected for an IELTS Task 2 response. The inclusion of personal plans and religious references is relevant to the theme but lacks the analytical tone required for this task type.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal or inaccurate (e.g., 'In this World everyone think like that'). The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the internal structure of these paragraphs lacks the necessary flow and logical sequencing to achieve a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'chearity' (charity), 'convinsed' (convinced), 'noution' (notion), 'responsibulity' (responsibility), and 'meachen' (machine). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. The writer relies on basic, everyday language, and there is little evidence of an attempt to use less common lexical items or idiomatic expressions appropriate for an academic context. Communication is occasionally hindered by these errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'everyone think', 'some one have'), sentence structure, and punctuation. The use of complex sentences is rare, and when attempted, they are often faulty or punctuated incorrectly. The high frequency of errors, including basic tense and word order mistakes, significantly impacts the readability of the text and indicates a lack of control over grammatical structures.

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