Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this world of modernization, being rich is not only with money the most important thing about being rich is that we have the opportunity to help other . In my prespective ,i firmly hold the belief that this statement is genuine and i agree with this statement .
Nowdays, rich is that person who is also rich in relations ,helping others, and many other qualities . Being rich is that think we can make our reputation and respect in society with our kind , helping and down to earth nature ,while being rich only in money is never joyful for your whole life money can only provide you happiness for a while . For example, a person who helps other always stay connected with people and individuals also take care of them and celebrate each celebration with giving love to each other . Moreover, another thing is that by helping other emotionally, financially or with any other facility provide the peace in life and the person become more rich with joy in life .
Being rich also not all time is the most important thing that one has the opportunity to help others because for all the time helping others is the important thing sometimes person faces the situations in which he was not able to help anyone and we need to understand it.
To conclusion , i can proudly say that if we move forward then we can take few with us in life not running alone while helping other provides you useful and important problems solutions.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position, but the development of ideas is limited. While you argue that helping others is a key aspect of being rich, the supporting arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the second paragraph attempts to define 'rich' in terms of relationships, but the explanation is vague. The third paragraph introduces a counter-argument, but it is poorly articulated and does not effectively balance the essay. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea with specific, concrete examples rather than general statements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'To conclusion', but they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly. The transition between ideas is frequently abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. For example, the final paragraph is disjointed and does not effectively summarize the preceding points. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally from the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use the word 'rich' and 'helping' without varying your language. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'being rich is that think' and 'provide the peace in life'. These errors occasionally make the meaning unclear. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise collocations, to express your ideas more effectively and avoid relying on basic, repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. For example, 'rich is that person' and 'helping other always stay connected' demonstrate a lack of control over basic grammar. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and incorrect capitalization. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, which hinders clarity. Focusing on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors will help improve your score in this area.
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