Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In contemporary discord , growing rate of individuals says that the being rich is that opportunity to help other peoples which belongs to poor class of our society has become a matter of considerable debate. While some people argue that help of others not relies on money, others believe that if you have capabilities or power to resolve the substantial concerns of needy peoples with the help of money. This essay will discuss both perspectives before explaining why I believe that being rich is one of the most common source to help others with money.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why it improves the life style of poor citizens also increase there productivity with help of money. In the result it makes stability in our society that he have chance to improve their capabilities and enhanced the cons and improve their self rather than looking anything else.

In conclusion, although if we have capabilities and power to change anybody life with our money has some merits.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. The essay is underdeveloped, with only one body paragraph that lacks sufficient supporting evidence or examples. While the prompt asks for an opinion on whether helping others is the most important aspect of being rich, the response only briefly touches upon this and fails to provide a balanced or fully explored argument. The conclusion is also incomplete and does not adequately summarize the main points. Due to the severe lack of length and depth, the task is only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there are some attempts at paragraphing, the transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and often incorrect manner, such as 'In the result it makes stability'. Referencing is frequently unclear, particularly with the use of pronouns like 'he' and 'their', which lack clear antecedents. The overall structure is fragmented, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's line of reasoning throughout the short text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic phrasing. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'contemporary discord' (likely meant 'discourse') and 'help of others not relies on money'. The student struggles to use less common vocabulary effectively, and the phrasing often sounds unnatural or imprecise. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly, and the errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'growing rate of individuals says' and 'help of others not relies'. Sentence structures are often faulty, particularly in the introduction and conclusion, where sentences are incomplete or lack proper grammatical links. Punctuation is also inconsistent. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often poorly constructed and contain significant errors, limiting the range and accuracy of the grammar.

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