Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people beileved that being rich has opportunity to help needy peoples. However, I completely agree with statement. Because rich people have a lot of sources.

However, Being rich is blessing from god and god say that if you are blessed then try to help other peoples who are in problem. To help other money is most important thing if someone want to do something in his life and he do not have money it is very difficult for him to perform his task successfully. There are so many opportunities for rich people to help other. I personally obeserve some rich people who have a lot of money. they opened some foundations like old age homes and shulters for poor people.

Although, Every rich people dont help poor. Chairty is very big thing for chairty the most important thing is having big heart to donate your own wealth to someone else. Rich people take part in race of world richest person they try save their money. The person who save money all the time it is very difficult for him to donate his money to poor. I personally amired ratan tata the ceo of tata company. He have a big heart that he donate almost his all money to poor people of india. H also maid car for poor people which is ver affordable his vesion is to prevent bike accident of families on road. He donate around 1.2 billion rupees which a huge amount.

In conclusion, God give opportunity to rich people to help poor it is very important to aquire this opportunity. It help to make soceity better.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The essay addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position, but the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you provide a relevant example (Ratan Tata), the argument relies heavily on personal opinion and religious justification rather than a balanced exploration of the topic. The response is a bit repetitive, and some points, such as the distinction between wealthy individuals who donate and those who do not, are not fully explored. To improve, ensure you provide more nuanced reasoning and a more structured approach to your arguments to fully meet the requirements of a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. While you use some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'In conclusion', they are often used incorrectly or in a way that makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the connection between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'beileved', 'shulters', 'obeserve', 'amired', 'maid', and 'vesion'. You rely on basic vocabulary, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas with precision. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'rich people have a lot of sources' (likely meaning 'resources') and 'chairty is very big thing'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on expanding your range of vocabulary and ensuring that words are used in the correct context, while also paying closer attention to spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Every rich people dont help', 'He have a big heart'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. While there is an attempt at complex sentences, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex grammatical structures. Proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency would also be beneficial.

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