Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Few have describe that the most essential thing about have a lot of money that one has occasion to support others. We have some openings to agree or disagree . I am strongly agree with this statement,If you are wealthy rich you will support other individuals in different ways.
Firstly , having a lot of money give you opportunities to support individuals in different parts of there life’s ,such as education, works with dealiy life cost , being rich is very important part of every human life , if we are rich easier first we can support over life ,then we can support others . And also the rich society there is less crime because most of the most crime become from poverty . Rich people should always help others especially poor people and students in there studies cost.
Secondly ,government should always makes opportunity for individuals the can work and earn money and become rich . Helping others make you feel comfortable and well. The rich people should make there responsibility to helping others , it will shows over society more connecting to each other . Rich people make factories to creat chances for people to work and the can earn money have a better life .
In conclusion I strongly agree this idea the rich individuals helps others the need help , and it’s make the country people connect to each other . That cause the crime will be less in the society because the mostly crime becomes from financial situations.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of the idea that wealth provides an opportunity to help others. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention education and crime reduction, these points are not fully extended or supported with specific examples or logical depth. The second paragraph shifts focus to government responsibility, which is slightly tangential to the core prompt about the role of the wealthy. To improve, ensure that every paragraph directly supports your main argument and provides more detailed explanations or real-world examples to substantiate your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' without smooth transitions between sentences. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly with pronouns like 'it' or 'there' which do not always have a clear antecedent. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence flows logically from the previous one to create a more cohesive argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'rich', 'money', and 'help'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'works with dealiy life cost' and 'make there responsibility'. These errors occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a broader range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise academic collocations. Avoid repeating the same words throughout the essay and focus on using words that accurately convey your intended meaning in a formal context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'having a lot of money give you'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'Few have describe'), and confusion between homophones like 'there/their' and 'there/their'. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty, leading to run-on sentences or fragmented thoughts. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and correct tense usage, before attempting more complex structures.
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