Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is a growing debate over whether having money wealth its important to help people out in difficult situations. I strongly believe that counting with economic resources can positively impact people because can provide sources for independence and ongoing incomes.

On the one hand, the benefits of having economic resources might significantly impacted low-income population, creating new employment opportunities. Furthermore, rich communities around the globe might generate economies such as work companies and retail markets where these people might be able to get a job with stable incomes. For example, several companies around the globe are building in middle eastern countries because they can provide ongoing work for its population. As a consequence, these low-income communities are constantly working under these companies, impacting significantly their incomes.

On the other hand.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under-length at only 130 words, failing to meet the 250-word minimum requirement. This severely limits the development of ideas. While the student attempts to address the prompt, the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly with 'On the other hand.' and failing to provide a conclusion or a balanced argument. Because the response is unfinished and lacks the necessary depth to explore the topic, it cannot be awarded a score higher than 4.0. To improve, the student must ensure they complete the full essay structure and provide sufficient supporting evidence for their arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay shows some attempt at logical organization through the use of transition signals like 'On the one hand' and 'Furthermore.' However, the abrupt ending and the lack of a complete structure make it difficult to assess the overall progression of ideas. Paragraphing is present, but the second paragraph is incomplete, which disrupts the flow of the argument. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and limited by the brevity of the text. To reach a higher band, the student needs to develop a full essay structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. Phrases like 'counting with economic resources' are unnatural; 'possessing financial resources' would be more appropriate. There is some repetition of terms like 'economic resources' and 'around the globe.' The student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary, but the limited length prevents the demonstration of a wider, more sophisticated range. To improve, the student should focus on learning collocations and more academic synonyms to express ideas with greater clarity and variety.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The text contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For instance, 'having money wealth its important' is syntactically incorrect, and 'might significantly impacted' uses the wrong verb tense. There are also issues with sentence structure, such as 'because can provide sources,' which lacks a subject. While the student attempts some complex structures, the frequency of errors is high, and they often impede the reader's understanding. Improving accuracy requires a focus on subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and predicate.

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