Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The debate about wealthy people can be beneficial for the society by helping others. Some people have different opinion about this will cause negative impact on society. This essay conclude the both views.
No doubt that rich people can be very beneficial for the society but totally rely on them can make people less ambitious and they will always look up for handouts and different kind of instant help will lead them to less motivated towards there professional life. Furthermore, one can not totally ignore the benefits of philanthropist. Wealthy people can help as a organization to take care of orphan children and create a fund to help needy students those have strong academic background but are not be able to study in prestigious universities because of lack of funds.
On the other hand, if society start rely on the funds of rich people this can cause a negative impact on society not only morally but also cause ever lasting effect on country's economy. With this type of activities society can not produce best brains that are ambitious and want to thrive in their professional field.
We need a balanced approach on this matter, on the same time we also motivate people to do hard work and always meet their needs by themselves without looking for temporary help. This will lead us to build a better a strong valuable society. Wealthy people also come forward for the help of nation at the time of emergency and natural disaster that can happen anytime.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the role of wealthy individuals in helping society. However, the position is not consistently clear throughout. The introduction states the essay will 'conclude the both views' rather than taking a clear stance, which is a requirement for a higher band. While the body paragraphs provide relevant points regarding philanthropy and the potential for dependency, the development is somewhat superficial. The ideas are relevant but lack the depth and specific examples needed to fully explore the 'extent' of the agreement. The conclusion attempts to offer a balanced view but remains somewhat vague in its final argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is present (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand'), but they are used in a somewhat mechanical way. There are issues with referencing and logical flow; for instance, the transition between the benefits of philanthropy and the negative impacts of dependency is abrupt. The opening paragraph is also weak, failing to clearly outline the essay's direction or the writer's position, which affects the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range expected at higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing or incorrect word choices, such as 'look up for handouts' instead of 'rely on handouts' and 'as a organization' instead of 'as an organization'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic terms like 'beneficial', 'help', and 'society'. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise collocations and a wider variety of academic vocabulary to express complex ideas more fluently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'if society start rely' (should be 'starts to rely'), 'those have strong academic background' (should be 'who have a strong academic background'), and 'are not be able to study' (should be 'are not able to study'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors in basic subject-verb agreement and sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.
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